Hey nightshadows!
This was an amazing poem!
I really like your opening line, "Dear the one I fell for,"
I like how you repeat the point that you're feeling are true, and that your thoughts are true. That gives a lot of emphasis to that point.
This line sounds really nice:
Would feelings still lay?
Would I cry?
I like how you express doubt at how you will react.
You have expressed your thoughts beautifully in this poem. I really loved the imagery that you have used, like when you said that your thoughts scurried quick, and that the roots grew thick.
On the whole, it was a beautiful poem. Can't wait to read more of your work.
Keep writing. <3
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