Nice use of language.
It is really unique how you used left and right to signify political parties to begin with, but I would flip stanzas two and one in order to first ease us into the typical thing we are used to and then show us how Left wing vs Right wing opposes. I didn't see that it was Left vs Right political parties until much later in the poem, and it made me trip. Another way that you could indicate it, is capitalize Left and Right when they mean the political sides. This will clear things up for the reader and the double play of the words is still just as brilliant because you use them the other way in the next, or first, stanza.
I love how at the end you use all of the negative stereotypes instead of the positive ones like Democratic, or For the People, or Conservative. Instead using the things like fascist and communist really can shock the reader if they don't understand the core of the terms and draw them into the poem, or make them gawk at your words.
As for a review, I would strongly suggest dropping the visual part of the poem just because it doesn't need it. It looks like a lot of work and it doesn't really work on YWS that well, so just let it go, let it left align and know that you've got it centered where you want it. Also being anal about the structure of lines can really make you miss some opportunities to show readers new breaks and the structure can be tedious to work around.
Points: 1883
Reviews: 806
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