Young Writers Society

HAHAHAHAHAhahaaaaaaa.

Sorry.

I love how you say "Bis-quickly" a nice twist on words. The way you describe the family eating Ego's is just another way of describing your little brother's pretending to be a dinosaur killing its prey. I'm not entirely sure if I understand what you mean in the second paragraph. A little confusing. So many big words!!! But seriously. This is a nice view of the average American family. Special nights mean: No Cooking For Mom! You must have had fun with this and i applaud you for your fantabulous use of vocabulary.BRAVO!!

Hi, HT here to review.

This was great, one of the better works that I've read so far. I particularly loved the lines:

You brought me up, to bring me down,
to make a better mess of me.

Although I like to think that I am pretty smart, I admit I had to look up the exact definition of the word, "quandaries," because while I got the gist of what you were saying I am an extremely OCD person who has to know the exact definition of every word she reads or writes in order to fully understand without a doubt, what the author is trying to say. So thanks for giving me todays word challenge. And I hope to read more of your work in the future.

Happy Writing!
HT

This is just great. It's equally well-written and hilarious. I'm especially loving that phrase, "deconstructed by a 'constructive' critics' conversational calamity". I feel like you just created the world's toughest tongue twister, but it's so much to take in, given that what you're trying to convey by it is so simple. Additionally, thank you for bringing up brunch. It's ten thirty ant night and you just made me hungry.

This is wonderful. I'd encourage you to keep writing!

Wow, I really love poems like this. Dark, humorous, and hitting me right at home. I don't really have any suggestions other than keep writing!:) Keep up the good work!

-Frayer