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Short and sweet! I liked the wording of this poem. Only one thing that I would have changed about it was in the last line. The poem has a rhythm, but I think the last line goes a bit too long. Maybe you could change it to "But all I can focus on is me and you." Otherwise, perfect in my opinion. I really like the descriptions of the moonlight. Great job!

Hey there, ilovegeeks! Today it's my pleasure to give you a review on this awesome poem. I'll be making this fairly short and sweet, just like your poem.

The midnight moon shapes your face perfectly,

It beams on us like it was made just for two,

As you speak, your words flow superbly,

As you speak, your words flow superbly,

But all I can focus on is the words me and you.

I like this poem. It is short and to the point, but it is full of meaning. You have fine wording, and correct grammar and punctuation. Great job! I hope to see more writings from you

This says a lot and its a very amazing poem.

In order to be able to have so much meaning in such little words and such a short poem shows great talent.

You can see that these two people know each other very well. They care a great deal, which is obvious, but they have spent lots of time. The only thing that matters at the moment is each other.

This makes you wonder about where this is. Who these two people are. How they fell in love. And what will end up happening to them.

A good poem leaves unanswered questions, just like this, and you did a really good job at it. Its very simple, and that's what the beauty in it is. People will have a greater chance of wanting to read it if it is.

Like other people said, it is a little cliche about the moon and only focusing on the words. And that is okay just as long as you make it mean your own thing. Just try to stray from things being a little too simple and same. You do still want your writing to be unique. But other than that, I think this is really great. Keep up the good work and continue writing.

Hello! racket here to review your short poem!
I really like this! Short and sweet and very well said and done. Good job! There's nothing really at first glance for me to comment on, so that's great! Let me look a bit closer...
Okay, well, your poem feels just a bit disconnected, like each line should be its own sentence. I have a few connecting words to suggest that might help?

A midnight moon shapes your face perfectly,
It beams on us like it was made just for two,

The midnight moon shapes your face perfectly
As it beams down on us as if it were made for two,

Hey there!
Nice poem you have here, short and sweet.

A midnight moon shapes your face perfectly,

As you speak, your words flow superbly,

But all I can focus on is the words me and you.

Hello!

Stegosaurus here for a review!

This is a good poem and glad you shared it on YWS! The diction that the author has it pure and I can tell it come from the heart as you wrote this- also I enjoyed the little rhythm you had in here as well.

As a fellow writer, I feel like you could expand more off of this since it has such emotion that it would suck to just leave it off there (however you can choose to live it off there since you are the poet of it). Also it doesn't seem to set off the theme as for what you are trying to go for.

It beams on us like it was made just for two,

But all I can focus on is the words me and you.

Even though this poem is short, I feel as though that makes it all the more powerful. I love the meaning and point in this poem because i can relate to it. The rhyme scheme is great, and I like how you put it in 2nd person point of view. Good job, I cant wait to read more of your work!:) I can definitely see you becoming a writer about relatable relationship type of topics.