Guess who? ((it's Q))
I did not expect the turn this chapter would take! The past little bit, both Kerra and Everen have been really devoted to finding out their respective murderers, and now we've lapsed into some sisterly time and some weird dream stuff, which is pretty neat for a change.
Do you remember when I’d tell you little stories? Everen asked hesitantly.
When I was in the hospital all the time? I remember. Kerra sent an emotion that felt like a wistful smile. You always were good at telling stories. Why do you ask?
I’m having trouble sleeping. Do you think you could tell one to me? She sent a sheepish feeling.
Kerra was quiet for just the space of a breath before she sent an all-encompassing feeling of love. It warmed Everen to the bones. Of course, she sent.
I looove this. <3 They've chatted a little before, but I don't think we've seen this much sisterly love evident between them yet. I also love the history of Kerra in the hospital and Everen telling stories--it shows a lot about them and their relationship. I wonder if Shandi's death is drawing them closer together again...?
The princess wore a dress made out of the very fabric of space-time, and a really rad jacket made from the hearts of dying stars.
I also really dig this imagery and story within a story.
A mixture of hesitancy, probing, and confusion, an alloy of defense and entreaty. This feeling seemed to amplify, getting stronger and stronger until...
She woke up. And she remembered it. She remembered the dream.
I usually remember the vivid feelings of my dreams right when I wake up, but there's also an accompanying image? So I don't know if Everen is seeing nothing or darkness or abstract shapes, but a little cue like the would be nice to add in along with the more prominent feelings.
Did you shut off your connection before you fell asleep? Kerra asked.
Woah, I didn't think about the connection in this way before. That's pretty cool, but adds a new and more complicated layer to the story as well. If one sister shuts it off, does it shut off for both? It sounds like the answer is no, if Kerra's forgotten to close it off on her end, but then would it really still be draining for her if she's not making an active connection? Wouldn't both of them know about this already/experience it more often if Everen used to help Kerra get to sleep with stories? It seems like something that all of them would already be familiar with. There's sort of some interesting new territory here.
No, but I’d give my left arm if I had a whole cheese platter in front of me right now.
You and me both, sister.
You can just go out and get some!
I love this!
At the end, when Everen and Kerra are just bouncing back and forth about cheese, I feel like there needs to be some sort of line like, "But in the back of her head, the feelings from the dream still lingered, stirring around along with her thoughts on the murders" or something, to show that it's still important and weighing on her. (assuming that it's going to end up being more than just the connection between the two!)
And speaking of the dream... I'm very interested in that. It seems almost like another person is linked in to her consciousness? There was her connection with Kerra, but then almost another entity. And I wonder if it might tie into the murders, something about what's going on. I'm really curious about what might happen in all of these areas!
This was a really fun chapter, and I loved to see the relationship between Kerra and Everen developing. They've been connected, but this is more like seeing them interact as sisters, which I love. (and I also wonder if they ever miss each other being physically there?) 100% agreement with Shady--I love your characters so much! They're an amazing part of your story.
-Q
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