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Everen looked at her notebook and shook her head. It was all too strange. There were the murders, of course, but whoever had done them was some kind of mastermind. That didn’t narrow it down though, because everyone on this ship was hyperintelligent. But somehow, the murderer was smart enough to outwit all the people investigating the case, which was practically everyone awake. No one was expecting to need law enforcement during the few years they’d be in space preparing to land on the new planet, so almost everyone awake had had the chance to poke around the crime scene and find any evidence they could.
No, the murders were strange, but it was everything else that made it even weirder. It had been a while since she’d noticed that different areas of the ship were using different units of measure, but Everen was reminded of it when she’d found a note about it in Warren Tallow’s personal journal. He had noticed that the units were different, and he was going to bring it up in his next meeting with the captain and the heads of crew. But he’d never made it to that meeting.
At first, Everen dismissed it as a normal thing. After all, she’d noticed it, and she had no talent with math. But then she saw on a loose piece of paper, as if she’d scratched it down in a hurry, that Haven had also made a note about it. She’d written: “Ctrl Rm: LY, Bridge: AU, M&P: MPrscs. Tell C next Tues.” To anyone else, it might seem meaningless, but Everen understood well enough. Because it wasn’t dated, Everen had no way of knowing if Haven had ever had the chance to tell the captain (who she assumed the C stood for), but the connection between the two victims was more than anyone else had to go on.
If Everen’s hunch was correct, which she figured it very well might not be, then whoever had killed these people was purposefully obscuring the numbers and units. But Everen couldn’t figure out why. If the numbers stayed incorrect, they’d miscalculate all sorts of things. They might blast right through the planet instead of touching the ship down lightly like they were supposed to. All sorts of things could go wrong. Did this murderer want the mission to fail? They were on the ship somewhere too though. Did they not care about their own life at least?
It just didn’t make any sense. Also she couldn’t see how Ptolemy, the third victim, was related. Did he know about the units too? Everen hadn’t found any notes about it in his room. Maybe the connection she was seeing was just a coincidence.
When Everen had discovered the small connection, however, she’d rushed to Janna.
“Did you tell anyone about how the units were messed up?” she’d asked, after ensuring the room was empty.
“Oh my, you’re right! I just plum forgot. I’ll make a note to–”
“No!” Everen had shouted, startling Janna.
“Don’t tell anyone. Not yet. Just trust me on this. There’s something fishy about it.”
“What’s wrong, Everen?”
“Don’t ask. I’m not sure for certain yet, but this can hold on just a little bit longer.”
“No, it’s actually really important, I can’t believe I forgot about it, I really have to–”
“No! You can’t. Don’t say anything.” Everen had grabbed Janna’s shoulders. “You have to promise me. You can’t tell anyone. Promise me.”
“Okay, alright!” Her eyes had darted back and forth, uncomfortable with being held like this.
Everen had stared deep into her eyes. She couldn’t risk Janna’s murder. “Promise me.”
“Okay, okay, I promise.” She had looked terrified.
Now Everen grimly closed her notebook. She was lucky that Janna had forgotten to say anything, else her friend might already be dead. Or maybe Everen was just holding back some crucial information that was in no way tied to the murders. No matter the case, Everen knew she had to get to the bottom of this quickly. There was no one she could trust, so she’d have to search on her own.
Everen? It was Kerra. She was transmitting a feeling of horror and sadness that was beginning to feel like the new normal to Everen. But the feeling still sent a chill down Everen’s spine.
Yes? What is it? She asked, dreading the answer.
I hate to bear more bad news… but Mom’s dead.
What!? How? Everen didn’t know what she’d been expecting, but it hadn’t been this. Their mom always felt like some immortal force. Even when Kerra told her how she’d gone a little bonkers.
The police said it was suicide. Everen could feel the hesitation in Kerra’s message.
But…? She prompted.
But I don’t think so. All the evidence points to it, but I think it was murder.
Everen groaned inwardly. Just what she needed. Another murder to think about. What was happening? Had the universe gone absolutely insane? What makes you think that?
I don’t know. I really don’t. The police had all this evidence for why it was unequivocally suicide, but I just got a feeling in my gut. Maybe I should ignore it. I think maybe the death part of my brain is malfunctioning after all of this.
Maybe, Everen sent. She wondered if her own brain was malfunctioning. I feel like I might be onto something about the murders on the ship.
Oh?
Yeah, Everen said, and then explained the theory to Kerra.
That sounds like a reach, but maybe you’ve got something there. It’s worth looking into.
That’s what I thought. Everen felt cheered at least that Kerra didn’t think it was a total leap in logic.
Meanwhile I have nothing to go on. There’s no way that anyone could have done it, but I just know that it wasn’t her. Kerra was sending a massive feeling of frustration. Everen could relate.
What’s some of the evidence against it, again? Everen asked, trying to be at least a little helpful.
Well for one, Ruth, er… Mom would have never opened the door to someone she didn’t know. I’ve been there when someone knocked and she shushed me so it wouldn’t sound like anyone was home. But the door didn’t seem to have been forced open at all. And the police didn’t find any evidence of anyone but her having been in the apartment, not even me. She sent a feeling of dry amusement.
Everen thought for a while. Eventually, she came upon an idea. A bit weak, but it was something. Well if the police couldn’t have detected that you were there, maybe someone else could have been there too. Maybe they have some kind of anomaly similar to yours, and maybe that same one would allow them to get past a door somehow? I don’t know. There’s a lot of really weird anomalies out there. Remember Gavyn?
How could I forget? Kerra sent a tingly feeling that Everen had come to associate with her laughter. You might have a good idea there, Everen. I’ll look into it! Thank you! With that, the connection faded away, and Everen was left with her thoughts and a notebook full of wild conspiracies.
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Hi fortis!
Oh my goodness, I love Everen the detective!
The last two sentences sound a little strange. Something about the "too though" and then the "their own life at least" doesn't really flow well. And this is a very interesting point--if the murderer does want the mission to fail, did they plan this from the very very beginning, when (presumably) they first signed up for the mission?
Eek! I love the collaboration between Kerra and Everen. It's terrible that their mom died, but when Kerra brings it up with Everen and her suspicion of murder, it just makes me even more convinced that all of these deaths are somehow connected. (and I'm suuuuper excited)
I don't know how the door systems work here, but it seems like there are a lot of smart people and techy things about, so it wouldn't be too hard to rig something to open the door? Or maybe there aren't signs of tampering with the lock either.
oooh, I wonder who that is? Maybe Kerra can give us some insight on him (?) later on.
I'm so excited for this chapter. I shouldn't be getting into murders, but I love the mystery going on. The different units thing is really cool, and it suggests that these people weren't killed for who they were so much as what they found out.
I don't know how much you want to delve into the mystery aspect of it, but if you wanted to, you could give us some extra information just for fun. Example: "Or maybe the connection was nothing. After all, the two of them had been from the same area of work, and one of them had this family connection." I don't know what information that would be, but just throw out some other possibilities that don't make as much sense as our main theory, just so we have some other things to mull over. But you totally don't have to do that, because the story is still fabulous without it.
I'm getting so into this!! I can't wait to keep reading.
-Q
Heya fort,
Jk, but jumping straight in with another Shady review for you on this fine Review Day, as I desperately try to claw the red team back to first place once again. Let's get started...
I'm baaaaaaaack. Did you miss me?
The way you wrote this isn't excessively clear. Is practically everyone awake smart enough to outwit the people on the case? Or is it that practically everyone awake was investigating the case? The which isn't super specific in this case, imo. I'm assuming it's the latter, but rephrasing this for clarity would probably be good.
Ooooh, so are Shandi, Kerra, and Everen sisters? With like a little three-way connection going on? Sorry, I'm kinda slow and still piecing things together. But that makes chapter 19 make more sense now haha.
Oooh, interesting thought! I'm really curious to know how this little quirk is going to play out in the murder investigation. I mean, the officers did say that the angle pointed to suicide, but then again they're a bunch of jerkface idiots, so what do they know?
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Okay! This was a really nice breather chapter. After the murder/suicide, and then all the tension with the jerk cops, it's nice to have a bit more of a cerebral chapter of the characters trying to get to the bottom of the murders and figuring out who who and the why behind all the deaths.
At the same time, this chapter was full of intrigue. Who did it? What's with the units? Is there a connection between the victims? No one (but you, lol) knows, and that's a really strong driver to keep reading to figure out what's going on. Very nicely done building the suspense.
Keep writing!
~Shady
This chapter is very interesting to read, because it has a bit of mystery. I found a few mistakes on the writting, but it is nothing too serious, just something you can easily correct. On the other hand, it is very well written. You know exactly how to keep the focus of attention where you wan't it to be, and you have the hability to keep it interesting. Congratulations! Please continue writing.
This chapter is very interesting to read, because it has a bit of mystery. I found a few mistakes on the writting, but it is nothing too serious, just something you can easily correct. On the other hand, it is very well written. You know exactly how to keep the focus of attention where you wan't it to be, and you have the hability to keep it interesting. Congratulations! Please continue writing.
Perfect chapter!
I cannot wait for more! Please let me know when you come out with the next chapter! This isn't going to be much of a review, because I didn't see anything wrong with this chapter. Everen and Kerra are soo on to something! I can feel it! XD
Keep up the amazing work, and looking forward to the next one!