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Song: My Fandom Beliefs

by erilea


Verse

When I close my eyes

There isn't anything I could see

But if I think just right

Things will come to me.

Pre-chorus

I see swords and pens mingled together

Escaping the labyrinth with wings of gold feathers

Helicopters constructed in midair

Inexplicably dramatic love affairs.

Chorus

And I believe

I believe in all of those things.

In gods

Goddesses

What wishing might bring.

I believe

I believe that someday

One day

I'm going to be a hero, someday.

Verse 2

Night falls over my head

I take in the nightmares I've been having in the dark

My dream crops to me are being fed

And I continue growing them on my sleep farm.

Pre-chorus

Camp Half-Blood prevailing over attacks

Silena leaving and not coming back

Elysium and Cerberus and Medea potions

Fighting and sparring and quick-thinking motions.

Chorus

And I believe

I believe in all of those things

In gods

Goddesses

What wishes might bring.

I believe

That someday

One day

I'm going to be a hero, someday.

Sub-chorus

I don't know if it's true, and I don't really care

It distracts me from fears and from nightmares

From endless deaths and injuries looming

My fandom beliefs almost consume me.

Chorus

And I believe

I believe in all of those things.

In gods

Goddesses

What wishes might bring.

I believe

That someday

One day

I'm going to be a hero, someday.


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Thu Nov 29, 2018 2:09 am
RowenaLynn says...



Hey this is pretty cool! Somehow stumbled upon it and it's awesome. I don't really know that much about songwriting (besides what I learned from my time in like 4th grade. *cringe*) but this is pretty cool. I always like cool bridges (or sub chorus as you called it I believe... again my knowledge is from the days when I thought I would be a song writer 😂)
But I REALLY LOVED THISSSS




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IceWinifredd wrote a review...



Hello there Wise!


Honestly, I like this song a lot better then the other one because of the fact that the subject of this piece is about fantasy and creatures of fantasy. It's not the usual genres of music one might stumble upon so I think that alone makes it very unique and different. I didn't spot any grammar, spelling, or punctuation mistakes so that's a plus. Well done on this as well. I really enjoyed reading this. Have a good afternoon. -IceWinifredd




erilea says...


Thanks! You too.



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Sun Aug 31, 2014 7:00 am
IamTraunt wrote a review...



Hey, Wise!

I repeat what jazzy has just said...

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS! I think you should be some form of a song writer when you grow up - if not for a full time job - at least try to go somewhere with it, this was just incredible. Yet again, repeating what jazzy said below, it was sooooo smooth, it flowed ever so well. It was creative, fun, bubbly - I just keep singing it over and over. I can imagine this being on the radio.
My favourite line:

I believe
That someday
One day
I'm going to be a hero, someday.

Your song was so inspiring <3 it is a million times better than the ones I've heard on the radio. You have put so much thought, so much emotion into this. It's just so awesome. Thank you for posting this!

Yours sincerely,
Traunt




erilea says...


You're so welcome! Thank you for loving it!



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Sun Aug 31, 2014 6:47 am
Dracula wrote a review...



I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT

Well... you get the point!

Seriously though, this is perfect! I sang it in my head twice and everything worked; the flow, rhyming and beat.

Are you going to sing this and put it on Soundcloud or something? Have you already?

I really think you should. ;)




erilea says...


No, sorry. Dunno.



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ExOmelas wrote a review...



One thing I noticed pretty quickly was that you haven't titled the verses as verses as you have done with the chorus and the pre-chorus. It was a little confusing (especially with YWS spacing) and for a while I thought you had a very long chorus containing two sub-choruses.

Also, while there were fandom references within song, it didn't seem like they were regular enough to make this fanfiction. I would suggest putting it in a word processor and highlighting your references then either spreading them out or adding some in.

That being said, I very much enjoyed those references and I thought they were a great balance between subtle and feel-inducing. I loved the sentiment and the hope and I feel your desperation about the shows, books and films I love. I remember once 'Starter For 10 actors' came up on pointless and I was alone in the room so I curled up on the floor and wriggled excitedly around. You have conveyed that perfectly here.

I'll end with a reference you may appreciate:

I didn't choose the fandom life, the fandom life took my hand and whispered, "Run!"




erilea says...


Hehe. Thank you!



ExOmelas says...


You're welcome :)



erilea says...


:D



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Heya wisegirl22! Writer88 here to write a review. Last one to earn a review star! Squee!!!

Overall, it was an interesting song. Some critiques:

Add some more description, vivid vocabulary and imagery. :) For example: "Fighting and sparring and quick-thinking motions." You could replace "quick-thinking" with a word like acute or alert. Many other places, too.

Maybe in your description, you could tell them the background information, just in case they don't know what you are talking about, though I think most of them do.

Now for happiness: I liked your idea, it was original and an awesome song! I like your avatar! :D




erilea says...


Good job on your review star! :) Thanks for the review, and the praise. I don't really like background description, and anybody who clicks on this can just go back and choose another thing if they don't understand. And if anyone asks, I can explain here.



writer88 says...


Thx! Your welcs! And that' just my opinion, you don't have to change it of you don't want to.



erilea says...


Okay. Thx!



writer88 says...


Your welcs!



erilea says...


Changed my avvie.



writer88 says...


Ya it's cute!



writer88 says...


Yup!



erilea says...


Why did you say yup?



writer88 says...


Sorry. Mistake...



erilea says...


Oh. Well, no matter! :D



writer88 says...


Hehe.



erilea says...


Heh...




The last of the human freedoms is to choose one's attitudes.
— Viktor Frankl