The Dress
Weaving the web of nothingness,
I borrow its finest silk.
Wrapped in ivory stained tears,
Coated with translucent decadence.
I weave the dress of my being
From the yarn of nothing,
And everything.
The delicate threads bound tightly,
Creating something not so unsightly.
For the beauty of sensitivity,
Lies not in the dress, but the fabric,
The fabric of multiplicity,
Which can be used simply;
Soft jackets, crisp shirts,
Preferable to worsted suits,
And provide a hardened exterior
To soften its gentle interior.
***
The dress is almost finished,
Whilst I wait for my soul to replenish;
If I don’t have one, is it their fault or mine?
They who say that a soul is the projection
Of my being into a spiritual manifestation,
Which has no place in the logistics of reality.
And I, who nodded my head like a fool,
Because I wanted them to be quiet.
And to not dampen the fiery youth of existence,
Unto something which whines of impermanence-
Yet if this indeed is true, what of death?
If all is transient, as ye have declared it so,
Then this is applicable to death, making it a nono
For those who wish to have a permanent ending,
Since that would have been their only footing
In this turbulent existence
But now, senescence is not possible.
If this! - if this even is rendered untrue,
Turning my face blue
With embittered tears
gazing up at the starry night.
With the wind howling
in the sweetened twilight-
Then the hell never ends;
Therefore, there is no hell.
***
The dress is ready now;
It shall be worn on each of my death days,
Whilst the nothingness of my reality
Blesses me with haloes of fallen devils,
Shrines, from beautiful sirens,
Hope, from the ripest fruits only found,
In the melancholic piano forest.
***
It is where they still reside,
It is where their projections have left scars;
Imprints from another realm,
a realm captured in the gaze
of a harlot, or the silk of a widowed spider,
singing harmonious ballads, mourning the loss of death
and heralding its perceived immortality...
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Top Graham Cracker - This is a poem about a dress, a dress that will stand the test of time, that is the narrator’s soul in physical form, that is the beacon of light in a cruel, horrid, and sometimes disappointing world. Something so simple can still mean so much.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, then you may.
Chocolate Bar - I love how you describe that this dress could represent more than what people see, that it could be what brings joy and softens the horrors beyond. I especially love the line of how Hell is endless, so that means there is no Hell, for if something were to go on forever, then it would lose its meaning and significance entirely.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a lovely poem about how one simple thing could mean so much to someone! The dress was described beautifully and I like how it seems to be the brightness of the dress that sheds light on what would otherwise be dark and cold. I have enjoyed reading this and…
I wish you a fantastic day/night!
A dress weaved from the finest silk of nothing, wearing these garments to fit the loss of each memory you hold dear (a million death days). The metaphors are quite graphic and imaginable, mentioning ballads, referring to yourself as a harlot and singing while mourning the death of immortality.
I personally haven't fit my dress just right yet myself, but it takes an entire lifetime to really find who we are. I absolutely love this piece because of the opened interpretations, but the way it spoke to me is highly relatable.
So glad you enjoyed it
Sure did