Hey! Forever here with a review!!
Ah this was an ideal situations we can find people in.
From what I understand, the story is about understanding love. I do have to say that the girl is in a pitiful condition. Though she loves him, she can't confess her love to him. If I am not very wrong, she actually wants him to understand that shebloves him but hm... He is not even in the verge of understanding her love.
He perhaps is quite busy with his own life and other things that he simply haven't noticed her love. Okay, we are in a dilemma sort of situation here. Like neither of them can be blamed. A person can indeed be busy with their life, maybe the girl simply doesn't show her love in front of him. How can he understand it then? I don't think he loves her, so it's a bit difficult to understand.
I really liked the position you set for him. It was a really good thing that the girl saw him as someone special, as someone who is completely different from others. This can indirectly mean that the girl saw herslef as a special person too. I am a bit interested in knowing the traits of this person, if any.
One thing that caught my attention is the repetitive nature of the story. If you re-read the story, you will understand this point very clearly. Like throughout the story, you kept on repeating the very same things, perhaps adding one or two new lines with a different idea. I think the repetitiveness can be avoided by cutting out those sentences. Overall, a pretty good and a realistic story.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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