I am enjoying your poem so much that i am wishing for more detail, more feel? I hope you understand me, because the other comments have already addressed punctuation. I feel like you can dig deeper and display more of your/her pain and anger of the love that wasn't truly love. What are her raw emotions when her eyes opened to what love truly is through watching others.
With love
ScarlettBlacck
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