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we left our bodies with the earth

by alliyah, dissonance, foxtails, herbalhour



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Stickied -- Sun Apr 07, 2024 12:20 am
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alliyah says...



A Poetry Jam collaboration by @creaturefeature, @herbalhour, @envy, and myself. Text Version below:

i mistake every nesting bird, for another one of your ghosts
the spring is your haunting time; fog settling across every field
(when the haze lifts, i always search for my past)
i heard the siren sings loudest just before the storm
& this was smog-in-your-lungs weather;
though you were much more like spring air
i take note of the ambiguity of your tree line &
your saplings in bloom, immutable & unearthly
(your roots are gone now; but these remnant limbs keep reaching)
the soil is painfully aware of your absence;
it is only a matter of time before i too
become a whisper in the wind
already i hear myself in the bird-song; only just above
the rise and fall of the horizon's morning breath
i think there is no such thing as an overstayed welcome
only these overlapping seasons;
when life-&-death come a little too close.




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Woooahhh people hold your horses….this is great!! The raw emotion and the desperation yet slight almost…jealousy portrayed is amazing and of course, the lowercase poetry is mind-blowing! I love how sad the whole “feel” of the poem is and the dreamy view the character has that they miss something or long for something SO MUCH that they start to put that something into everything they see.
“I mistake every nesting bird, for another one of your ghosts”
This is absolutely awesome! Happy Napo!!^^




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Sun Apr 07, 2024 1:37 pm
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RavenAkuma says...



This is great!! Incredible work, all four of you!! ^^




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Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!

i mistake every nesting bird, for another one of your ghosts
the spring is your haunting time; fog settling across every field
(when the haze lifts, i always search for my past)
i heard the siren sings loudest just before the storm
& this was smog-in-your-lungs weather;
though you were much more like spring air
i take note of the ambiguity of your tree line &
your saplings in bloom, immutable & unearthly
(your roots are gone now; but these remnant limbs keep reaching)
the soil is painfully aware of your absence;
it is only a matter of time before i too
become a whisper in the wind
already i hear myself in the bird-song; only just above
the rise and fall of the horizon's morning breath
i think there is no such thing as an overstayed welcome
only these overlapping seasons;
when life-&-death come a little too close.


this is such a beautiful poem that you all have written together so much so that i had to read it more then once to really feel the meaning behind it, I feel like it is a poem about loss love and pain and losing once self. in very descriptive lines used with simple words that flow so well when together it showed such meaning, it in away made me feel sad but grateful for what I have at this present point.

I don't read poetry very often but since being on YWS i have seen very talented poets in a very short space of time, and i am almost in owe of how you write this so wonderfully, i look forward to seeing more of everyone's poetry.

Please keep writing, published poetry that is this good is hard to come by at least it is for me, you all have a gift and I hope you continue to use it. :)

hope it's okay that i did a review but didn't give any advice i'm new to this hole thing so not really sure what i'm aloud and not aloud to do in regards to what I can put in a review.

anyway that's it from me

hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight

See Ya




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herbalhour says...



lowercase poets united




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dissonance says...



monumental moment for yws poetry





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