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A/N: Before reviewing, be sure to do as the title suggests!
This was just a fun experiment I thought of and wanted to share. I would love to see other takes on this format, if this is new to you and inspires you in any way!
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Neither version is autobiographical. I'm much more of a novelist than a poet, and don't worry, I haven't given up hope of maaaaybe publishing a book some day!
Absolutely freaking amazing. I'd write a review but I'm kinda sorta late for marching band... But I thought I'd say that.
Absolutely freaking amazing.
Aw, thanks!!! <33
Why am I only now discovering this amazing poem?! Love this!
aw why hello there anchovies! :3 thank you!!
HOLY CREATIVE HOW DID YOU COME UP WITH THIS!!!! At first I thought the title was cool so I clicked and I thought the words made sense for some reason so I went to the comments and I didn't know I had to click ctrl + a. I was about to yell in class OMG I JUST UA- WOAH IM ASCENDING-! when I saw it! Like I'm completely amazed! So amazed I came back now at midnight just to read it again AND THE ACTUAL POEM ITSELF IS WOW! CHEF'S KISS! YUMMY! EVEN THOSE WORDS CAN'T EXPLAIN HOW BEAUTIFUL AND CREATIVE THIS IS!
Ahh I'm so glad you like it! <3
This is crazy good and creative!
Awww, thank you! <3
i verbally went "whoaaaa" after i "ctrl + a"ed that was amazing
YAY hehe <33
is it alright if i try this out? (i probably won't post it here and if i do i will credit you as the mastermind ofc =3)
Please please do! The main reason I shared it in the first place is because I'd love to see other takes on it!
thank you so much!!
this is an awesome poem
Naaaur not the spotlight!! Get it off me!
(thank you chi!! <33)
very good
Thank you! <3
😲 Cleverrr~ It's like reverse erasure poetry. 👀
I dig the meaning too.
Oooo yeah, it is in a similar vein as blackout poetry!
I'm glad your words AREN'T on a traditional shelf right now -- or else we wouldn't be treated to this incredible ctrl + a effect!
Mayhaps it COULD be done traditionally... I know lemon ink for example is activated by heat!
OOOH that would be pretty incredible!
The gasp I let out when I saw the full thing??? This is SUCH a clever formatting choice and I am so here for it.
HEHE that's exactly the response I was hoping for, love to hear it!
Oy, this is lovely play with formatting, and bravo on breaking and making the flow with page space. 'Metronome' was a neat touch in diction, too, polysyllabic against your shorter words, but staccato.
I think I'd only suggest that the you switch the tense of your final stanza: 'my words are rather than 'my words would. This would maintain verb tense consistency, and give the final point a present punch. If you want to keep the syllable count, perhaps 'will be.'
But 'tis just a thought. Cheers for the read,
IMP
Oy, thank you so much for reviewing, Imp! <3 Great advice.
This is a very cool structure and it fits the title perfectly. The subject you chose to write about is very fitting for this platform as well, since mostly all the accounts love to write. You’ve captured the emotion spot on for the anticipation to write. For critiques, I genuinely don’t know what I could say, it’s pretty perfect. I’ve resonated with your poem and it’s something I was excited to read.
Thank you!
omg this is so creative and I love it so much!!!! it's like i got a buy 1 get 1 free deal of poetry
Thank you Toast!!! >:) <3
Thank you Toast!!! >:) <3
Thank you Toast!!! >:) <3
Oops... gotta love YWS' reply duplication glitch LOL
Lol it%u2019s fine it happens to me all the times as well
WOWOOWOW this idea and concept is so cool! beautiful execution, love the negative side being revealed after cmd+a being used. this is so cool OMGGGG
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your words have indeed made it onto MY shelf, amazing work. this perfectly captures writer's block. I feel like this pretty much all the time when I sit down to write something, and this poem feels like a look into my thoughts, amazing.
I've called this poem amazing like 6 times now but holy hell it actually is so good. i love the evil characterization of the blank document, the heartbeat metronome comparison is so cool. the poetry cemetery is also really cool, I've buried a lot of my work there too.
overall, I love this poem. everything is perfection. keep it up man!!!
love, ash
Aw ash I'm blushing! You're right, a digital shelf is still a shelf! Thank you so much for the review and the sweet words <3 Glad to hear you could relate to it in some way
of course!!! best of luck!!