A Movie Date: The Previews

EVERYTHING FROM HERE DOWN IS FROM A PAST POEM THAT OCCUPIED THIS SPOT!
PLEASE MOURN THE PAST POEM!
IF YOU DON'T IT PROBABLY won't HAUNT YOU TONIGHT!
BUT IT'S BETTER SAFE THAN SORRY!

Hello Roxy here
I wouldnt use the words "hot guy" Im not doubting that he is but thsts more something you would say in conversation rather than a poem like this, you could even use attractive or something similar
I agree with guinnepiggirl, i could make "he" ittalic,
you also shouldnt start off sentences with cappital letters with out punctuation, unless youre capatalizing every sentence
I do like it bit as guinnepiggirl said-it needs more umph!
hope you find this helpful!
--Roxy

Very interesting.
Hmmm... I don't think the italics on the 'he' are necessary. I think you can leave the reader to do the 'bam bam BAM' in their mind.
I think maybe work on the structure, the line lengths and such. The verses are all different lengths which is a bit hmm-ie.
'Oh boy don't you see I'm hiding something
My only best friend who doesn't know'
Likey, likey, likey!


'It drives me crazy not telling you
but if I did I'd probably never see you again
and that'd hurt more'
Although this is ok, as a last verse it needs more work. It's like, it's ok but could do with something that'll make it stay with you, will get you thinking. It needs to make you feel some empathy or even some disturbance, you need to say about how it's breaking your heart, killing you inside. Every time you see him you die a little bit and you know you should distance yourself but whatever or something like that.

So, I thought it was really good but it needed a little bit more vaBOOM!
You understand?
But bravo!