The Theme in this Poem is Loneliness

Nice. I often have the urge to parody the self-indulgent conventions of a lot of emo/teen/angst poetry and literature. But then I stop myself, because I know my readers will just think to themselves, "Well, OK, sinistercutlass feels this way about emos, but where is sinistercutlass's original work?" You know what I mean? "Great - complain all you want, but at the end of it, the proof in the pudding is the quality of your original work, not your acidic reviews or parodies."

That said, parodies have their place. Yours, here, is appropriately funny (the way satire should be), and not angry in that acrid, over-sensitive way that other complaining-parodies are. Your poem here retains a balance between empathy and self-deprecation from the "emo" character. This balance between empathy for the subject, and criticism of the subject's ways, is the mark of the best satire. Believe me; I know. I've read Sinclair Lewis's works.

Your title is perfect. If you so desired, your entire poem could be that title on its own. In my opinion, that title sums it all up so well.

Your imagery is well-chosen, clear, and vivid. I was immediately transported to some quiet, residential neighborhood of bungalows somewhere around Minneapolis in 2005, with Green Day's "Boulevard of Broken Dreams" blasting in my earbuds.

You've successfully expressed the exquisite, relieving pain of loneliness here. Sometimes, while the logical solution is to go find some friends to hang out with, the actual solution is to indulge in time spent alone and work out all the frustrations pent up inside. In my opinion, the following stanza (my favorite in the whole poem) sums all that up perfectly:

"I meant to call you,

call him and call her,

but I didn't.

I prefer not."

Hey, I'm here to review, and I need to make this quick. Happy Review Day, anyway!

I like how the persona expresses himself by playing guitar - it gives me a nice imagery of how he's feeling, not to mention his persistence to keep playing, and how it shows when he's sweating and reaches the third song, really shows itself.

The actions just keep being more serious, of how it turns to punching the neighbour's lawn (which I wonder, is it necessary to say you're punching your neighbour's lawn instead of your own? What's the significance of it? >.>). I think this is delivered well, how desperate or lonely the persona's feeling right now.

It's nice to see that it's not about your lover only, but your friends. You can be alone because they're not with you, not necessary your lover. I think this is a nice touch and an attempt to go away from the typical trend where being lonely means your lover leaves you, that you're not with your lover. It's nice.

The last stanza is very true. I mean, sometimes we just feel like being alone is the perfect situation for us when that's might not be the case. But then again, that's what loneliness feels like. Anyway, keep up the good job!

Hello Stranger!

I really like this poem. I especially like that the title tells the basis of the poem before I even read it. I like that the loneliness the speaker is intending is not the loneliness that you normally think of (As in that sad feeling you get when your friends go see the movie that you really want to watch without you). It has more of a 'I want to be alone' feel, and that is not something I've seen a lot in poems.

Good Job!

Hi Stranger!

There's a feeling of loneliness in the poem and really everyone has these type of moments when you are willingly lonely.. So yeah really true and REALISTIC!!

Well but I would like to talk about the lack of rhythm.. The verses were really expressing a lot in little lines but there was well.. I actually didnt find any pattern of rhythm , well I dont know if its just me but yeah thats what I felt, its interesting, though rhythmless but any reader will keep reading so Its something like I havent seen for while. So hats off! Sorry I am saying it so many times but you lacked rhythm at this one!

The loneliness was outstandingly captured in the verses so I loved it! Keep it up, friend!

And what you wrote in the title, um it be better if you wrote it in the description and chose another title! Like- Lonely melodies etc you know.

Well bye and good luck! Please let me know when you are writing again! I am looking forward to get another phenomenal creation of yours

~M.A.S.16

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