Young Writers Society

despite being hilarious but it has a strong message embedded therein. I like writers that hold aesthetic in one hand and truth in the other hand as they explore the poetic universe. the persona is dedicated towards actualising his dreams but he losing control of his pedal shows that the destiny of man is most times beyond his control,in other words,there are powers beyond our control that paddle our canoe,but this doesn't stop of making effort like the persona but the persona's attitude at the end encourages us to happy whereever the wind of life blows us to.nice aesthetic and a wonderful message.

This was hilarious And I agree if you could either extend it or make more like it, it would make an amazing children's story or picture book. I envy writers like you because I can't write humorous stories or come up with things that make people laugh. You have a very good talent of making people laugh, and that is a great thing. Amazing poem and I hope to read more like it.
Remington38

Though the titile does not well comprehend the theme of the poem yet i like the theme alot.really goal should be rightly set.however i myself am a aimless man.the starting was that u shaved ur legs for being a bicyclist.thats a bit odd.then at tha end u rold urself carrot and gave the message tgats good.

I actually LAUGHED OUT LOUD when I read ,
"and that, kids, is the story of how I turned into a carrot."
I'm understanding that even when you strive to be that someone or somebody, you might not reach that. Then when you don't get there, it feels like a knife stabbed in your back. But sometimes you will reach that point, where you did. Writing such an awesome poem. (Humorous, too!) You strived to write it right, and you certainly succeeded. Im curious to see more of your work, so keep it up!

Hi Stranger,
What I extracted from this poem was simply the way of life. Since poetry can be analyzed in different way, allow me to share my interpretation.
The shaving of the legs represents dedication to a passion, the goal of being a biker represents- well, dreams in life. The crash stands for emotional or physical hardships life combats you with. Becoming a carrot shows that often times we are destined to be a completely different person than we desire.
I find this message deep and unfortunately true. Great job on writing this.
-Mia

Hey, Strange.

So, I know that poetry is something that can be interpreted in more than one way, so this is what I got out of it. The legs are shaved, and that is a preparation for some goal that is set. The goal that is set is becoming a bicyclist, and just as it is so close to being completed, the bike (the ride toward that goal) crashes and get completely destroyed.

Also, I see the carrot thing as a reincarnation after hitting the tree and dying. But it is good, because it is a second chance at life, a second chance to enjoy the things that we take for granted in the pursuit of something greater. I think that the message here is to not gaze at stars while the moon is the only thing within reach, and not to look at the uncertain futures while the present is here for us to enjoy.

This poem has a neat, symmetrical format, which contributes to its aesthetics, and a title that does not give away its contents. It's funny how without thinking too much about it everything seems so random, and perhaps it was intended to be that way, but after giving it a little thought one could find ways to connect every dot.

I have not reviewed many poems, nor do I think that I could do it properly, but I hope that this review gives you some insight on how one of your readers interpreted your poem. Keep up the great work!

This is a great poem,but try to maybe go a little Dr.Suess style.My favorite part is the beginning because of how you really describe what you were doing.I honestly think that this poem should be in a kids poem book,because it is funny and very cool.I think that if this gets out to the world that you will be famous!