Hi Stranger!
I think this is a pretty cool poem (actually I like a lot of your poems).
I like how it switches between "i" and "you". It creates two contrasting characters we don't know much about, but just enough.
I was thinking about the title while reading this and I was thinking (sorry if this isn't what you had planned for this poem) that it's almost giving reasons for the narrator to drown, and maybe even reasons for the person the narrator us with to go drown. I'm not quite sure.
I like the style of clipped, simple sentences that state clear facts. It's different from some poetry I see, and it makes me think.
Anyway, I liked this poem a lot. I'm still thinking about it and trying to find different meanings in it. Great work!
-Falco
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