Young Writers Society

I enjoyed this. Its not too much or too drawn out. In a sense it is what it is. Nothing is every without meaning so i do feel its fair of me to say its a poem about nothing... But kinda. Its fun and alittle whimsical, carefree and laid-back. Its simple and I like it. Good job.

I dont want to say I wasn't impressed because I feel as though that wasn't the point of the poem. It was just something to read and sometimes those can be artistic. It's black and white and sometimes that can be colorful, I guess

Cool how you just put random ramblings down as a poem. However, I wouldn't get too comfortable with that if I were you. Just because it was successful once doesn't mean further attempts aren't going to sound cheesy. I personally wasn't as impressed with this one as the one was just in the literary spotlight. Maybe that's just my opinion, but think of how you can add a little more flavor or humor if you decide to let your random thoughts tumble out in poetry again. That way you can keep that amusing, captivating factor in there. The first poem was a great hit. Keep developing your skill.