Young Writers Society

As others have mentioned, perhaps upping your word choice/vocabulary would make the poem a bit stronger, but it's definitely very relatable, especially when the stress of going back to school starts settling in after the holidays! I enjoyed the consistent rhyme scheme (though that may be a personal preference. I want to commend you for the repetition that takes place in all three stanzas -- "so", "this is", and "they got" captured my attention through what I assume is the intentional implementation of assonance. Just a tiny grammatical comment -- a period is missing from the very last line of the poem but aside from that, I think it's great that you're getting back into writing and holiday break is the perfect time to do so.

Hello, OgName! I'm going to call you that, if that's OK with you,
Honestly, this poem was SUPER relatable! It's honestly like you know me! I especially related to the line, "After the five days are over, you have to survive another week." I've thought stuff like this all the time! Also, while we're on the subject of this particular part, I just loved how you phrased it! I always love reading well written words, and those are consistent throughout the piece! So great job on that!
A few things I did notice in the last line, "So I know you can do it with a smirk" First, you forgot a period at the end of the line, which is inconsistent with the last few stanzas. Also, one little nitpick, I think the word 'smirk' doesn't really fit in the context of your poem. It does rhyme with work, but I think some better words would be 'Grin' or 'smile' But that's just a small nitpick.
One other thing, I noticed that the rhyming scheme wasn't consistent, (Eat a cookie every time I say 'consistent') Might want to be something you look into.
Other than that, I love how you phrased the stuff in this poem! It's relatable, the spelling and grammar is on point, and I love, love, love the message! So, virtual high five! Hope you have a great day, and a Merry Christmas!

I loved this poem half of cause I really feel this poem since I'm still in school. There were a few grammar mistakes including capitalizing all the lines ever the ones just after a comma. In the first line of the second stanza I would take out them, "the." The poem had a good flow to it and semi-rhyming that made it really cool to read. I kind of wish that the ending was just a little stronger maybe like a stronger bit of encourgaement.

Lol it's not that bad, I adore the structure u use bc ik it can be hard to make it look so nice, like wow it's amazing. And the idea is definitely relatable, as well as the details and points in the poem, like surving week after week, and knowing u can get through it bc others have as well. One thing that I think needs work though were some of ur lines, like "for some it's a great concern," and I was confused on who exactly it was a big concern for, and one big one was "this poem is about conquerors," like I really don't know what you meant there lol. But one line I reeealllyyy liked was "the stress turns to procrastination, like Yes! That is so true!!

Overall, and especially as a you're person recently returning to writing, I enjoyed this poem very much, and I can't wait to see how ur writing improves as u get back into it!!

Yes, I know this is a very bad poem. It's very sappy and weird, but I haven't gotten a lot of practice lately. I haven't written for months, mainly because of school. You can review if you want, I really need the tips to get back on my feet with poetry.
Thanks!

-@SuperOriginalName