One hundred thirty-three

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Now, you not at the bottom that you want people to take note of the parentheses. Well, I think you should, too. I think you've gotta rework a couple lines, 'cause it seems like the intent is for us to see the stuff inside as additional, but if you take those phrases out it sometimes ruins the sentences. This can be fixed by rearranging words. For example:

don’t you know that
(skinny is relative?)
and that the tags on your jeans

If you take out the addition, you have: "Don't you know that and the tags on your jeans"

All you gotta do is put the and in the parentheses (you can lose the question mark), take out the second that, and you'll be in business again.

used to be
(maybe more than a little overweight)
But you were eightnineten

Here, too, you just have to take overweight out of the parentheses. You can even leave it on the same line that it's on. c:

The next thing I think you need to think about is the voice. Who is speaking this? Even if you don't have a specific person in mind, you've gotta keep in consistent, because at one point you break into I:

I honestly don’t care what people said back then
(the past is the past, after all)

And it shakes everything up. Keep it consistent so we can focus on the message instead of the delivery style.

Now, as for the material and the way you've written your sentences. I think you might want to consider approaching this a different way. I don't know if it's just 'cause I'm jaded, but I feel like I've heard all these words in these exact patterns before. "Fat is just a number" (okay, not that, but you know what I mean). Those little phrases everyone says when trying to talk about weightloss and weight loss problems. That's not to say that this isn't an important topic. I want to see you talk about it successfully and artfully, is all. Laying everything out like a dialogue doesn't evoke much. I don't feel anything when I read this. Instead, I logically process that this person is having a down fall and I should feel bad, but the poem doesn't hit me viscerally. It's far too explain-y to engage me.

So I'd challenge you to go beyond the "weight is just a number" and try to access the feeling beyond that. Like, I know for me it's a challenge 'cause food reminds me of family and happiness, and I feel like if I deny it, I'm trying to be better than my family, which leads to a really emotional battle for me. This person doesn't have the same problem, but she has her own, and if you accessed whatever it is, it might become more interesting, emotional, and engaging.

Otherwise, the weight markers serve as a good way to break up stanzas. Also, a note: I used to use the {} all the time because THEY ARE SO PRETTY, but I came to realize they actually look weird to other readers. You and I have a taste for them, but we gotta leave that behind and use them when they're actually intended to be used.

I hope this was helpful. If you have questions, I'd love to talk to you more about them. c: Just PM me anytime~

Good luck and keep writing!