hmmmm...Thanx!
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I'm pretty tense because this is the first poem which is very different from what I write.
This was written in a hurry,I know I got to revise it again,it has somethings to be fixed.
But if you really point out the things it would be helpful.
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The feeling is new...
I had it for the last few months,
yes I'm having it still too.
Know not when its going to leave me,
but I get it very often and everytime it seems new.
Its the...
feeling for him,I know not
what feeling it is,
sometimes its so confusing
it leaves me all numb.
I know not...I know not, what feeling is this.
Is it love, is it hate?
Or is it just something fake?
Does it come straight from my heart?
Is this just a feeling of being a teen
or is this just natural?
Is it just for fun
or is it out of sympathy for the love he gave?
I know not,I know not...
the feeling is new.....it is new....
I don't die over his looks,
neither on his attitude.
Yet when he speaks,
Its sure to bring a smile on my cheeks.
When he is around I know not I feel how
but when he is away,
I know not but i surely feel the emptiness.
Is this feeling just that i like him
as a friend,
or is it the deeper feeling,
I know not,I know not....the feeling is indeed new.
this is still rough i can see, but i like the complexity. i have to say that its typical complexity (paradox i know) but how you sum it up is effective, its quite simply.....new.
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