It's My Turn Now.
I was marked for failure
Got told that it was mine
It's their turn now
But I'm gonna show them
Just how far I can go...
Cause it's my turn now
Got told that I wasn't worth it
I said that you were full of shit
Added that you shouldn't throw a fit
Said that it wasn't right to hit
Got told that I was a failure
Didn't believe a word that was said
Just thought that I'd do my best
Never thought I'd get so far
I wasn't marked for success
Got told I didn't deserve it
It may be your turn just now
But I know I'm worth it
So I'm gonna show you
It's my turn now
Got told that I'd never make it
Got told that you gotta fake it
Said I'd show you my worth
Cause it's my turn now
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Bravo Scarlett! I like the poem. That could be a life poem for many. Keep it goin chicka!
So in your face.
love how intense it is for sure.
I like the fast pace and beat as well.
I hope I can learn to emanate that in my own work some day.
I really like this poem. Especially the bit that rhymed...because it was about someone striving for something. And i think its awesome.
Thanks for the reviews guys.
MV: It's their turn to shine, that's what I meant. Sorry for any confusion!
Elinor: I guess I should add "I" to those "Got told that it was mine" lines.
Thanks again for the reviews.
~Scarlett.
Hey! It's MV, or you could call me Sarah, but whatever works really
anyways, onto the review 
This poem was fairly good, it had a beat that worked and made the reader keep reading. I think one of the reasons that I liked it so much, and why a lot of people like it a lot as well, is because it's relatable, because a lot of us-me included- have had people tell us that we can't do something.
There's really only one thing I can think for you to improve.
I'm sorry if I sound incredibly stupid
Keep writing!
~MV
Hi Scarlett!
This was very nice. It was strong in all areas, but there was one minor thing that I didn't like. It had to deal with a line that you repeat several times throughout the poem:
You don't have a subject for the verb here in this sentence. Basically, who or what did the action happen to? Even though it's obvious because of this in first person, it's still grammatically correct to specify.
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Otherwise, another nice job! Thanks for letting me read your poem.
-Elinor
I like it. Maybe that's because I can relate to what you are saying in the poem. What exactly did you get marked as a failure for? and who is calling you a failure? Secondly, How did you show the person that you succeeded? I think that you did a good job with the rhythm of the poem. As a reader I would love to have more back round.
It is a really good poem, and has a good use of repetition which can be quite hard to use, and is often a bit of a wrisk. The topic you chose to center it around was Quite origonal, and it had a nice flow and rythem. I can't really think of any criticism, exept for that even though repetion can make a nice effect, don't overuse it.
Thank you for the reviews, guys. Can I just say that when you read my poems, they are usually meant to be how they are... Sometimes. Anyways. Thank you again for the reviews.
~Scarlett.
Nice. Feels really close to life. But yeah, like hero suggested, more detail please!
Well done. I liked this. It seemed kind of personal... enough. BUt a suggestion would to be to make it more... detailed? Accurate? Whatever the case - awesomeness.
Fly On,
Hero