Inspired by a true story
I am a heroic person, am I not?
I pull the strings of an attack, and I strategize the entrenchment of a defense.
I claim to fight for peace, for my enemies wish chaos.
But... it is not true.
I laugh at destruction and despair.
I cackle at murderous actions and the death of my opponents.
I enjoy the sight of suffering.
Then what do my words mean?
I am speaking like a hypocrite.
Claiming to love peace and sovereignty, but I spread chaos and destruction myself.
I am not a royal sovereign.
I am the precursor of pain.
My battles are not fought over peace, they are over control and gold.
My title was earned not by my capabilities, but because I am most powerful.
I would rather kill than live with what I consider an idiot, a retard.
I wish nothing but death and pain upon my enemies.
I claim the world knows no peace and love, though I am part of the problem.
I am no hero. I am no hero. I am no hero.
It repeats in my head every time I see someone being tortured for my actions.
Would it kill to be nice? I would say yes.
But less would suffer if I hadn't existed.
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This poem really highlights how cruel and hypocritical our society and government are today. There are people who claim to want justice, liberty and freedom for the people, but then again, they are the same people who do very wrong things. I'm glad this was addressed in your poem and the way you put it in first person point of view really captured the overall meaning.
''I am a heroic person, am I not?
I pull the strings of an attack, and I strategize the entrenchment of a defense.
I claim to fight for peace, for my enemies wish chaos.
But... it is not true.
I laugh at destruction and despair.
I cackle at murderous actions and the death of my opponents.
I enjoy the sight of suffering.
Then what do my words mean?
I am speaking like a hypocrite.''
The fact that the narrator actually says he is a hypocrite hit deep. I wonder how many of the people in the government believe that they are actually hypocrites. They must think to themselves, ''Yeah, I proclaim to help the people, but nah, I'm not like that.''
''My battles are not fought over peace, they are over control and gold.''
Now this is my favorite part of the poem. One, because it rhymes and 2 this is definitely relatable. I don't want to bring up any names (because for fear that the government might get a hold of this and come after me), but the current president in America just threatened Venezuela that he would take over it. He did say that illegal drugs were coming into the United States from there, but here is the underlying issue. It's not because he wants to look out for the American people, it's because he wants the oil, or as you said in the line, ''gold''.
I just loved this poem. I'm glad there are people who understand the political climate of this world, and they aren't afraid to write about what is happening around them. For that, I commend you.
Hi, Rookie! I love this poem! The contrast between what the speaker does and says reminds me of any modern politician (I'm not sure if you meant it that way, but that was just my interpretation). I especially like the line "I claim the world knows no peace and love, though I am part of the problem." It just aids the characterization of the hypocritic speaker, showing some cognitive dissonance. I love the title as well. When I first saw that title, I thought this was going to be about begging people to be kind. I like the reveal that the speaker is the one who isn't nice. It really subverted my expectations! Keep it up!
Thank you for giving your opinion! This poem seems to be liked by a lot of people. Well, I know what it's like to be a hypocrite, because I have done such things myself. I've stopped doing it, but I get reminded of the painful past sometimes. I hope this inspires the victims to forgive, and the perpetrators to ask forgiveness.
Wow, what a true turning point of the poem.
Hi Rooke, I'm Lullaby and I'm just dropping in to write a review of your work!
The question of the title: Would it kill to be nice? is a really intriguing title, and instantly captures the reader to want to understand the question, or even see if there's an answer to the question in the poem. By the end of the poem, we (the reader) learn why this question is the title, and it's amazing.
This poem is so unique as the narrator is having a mental back-and-forth between their intentions and actions. It's really interesting to read something from a villain's POV rather than a hero, but also from a villain who knows what they are doing is bad. Unlike some, this narrator seems remorseful. In the last line shows the true regret of the narrator. It's a very interesting story and poem as it navigates evil, actions with consequences, and even regret. It shows the humanity of someone who is aware of their harm.
I really enjoyed this poem as it captures the attention throughout. Hope to read more of your work soon! Keep writing
Thank you! It seems people are thinking of the same thing here, that is the hypocritical and melancholy of the narrator. It says inspired by a true story right there because I know what it is like to be a hypocrite and regret it. I've repented for this sin, but sometimes it still strikes randomly in my memory.