Hello!
First things first, I think I haven't slammed the like button that hard in quite a while. There were so many little details that I resonated with in this piece- the VCR is such a quintessential part of my childhood, but so many kids these days have no idea what a VHS tape even is- keep in mind, I'm only in high school. "Kids these days" are a few grades just below me, to be perfectly honest. But I wore out my copy of Blue's Big Musical as a kid- mom had to buy me a new copy after mine broke several times. It's such a relatable topic for people my age, really.
Your visual presentation is very appealing,if maybe a bit scattered about. It works in this case, luckily, but be careful of matching the presentation with the subject matter in the future.
The fragment with "How they could bring a few pictures to life on a TV that was as deep as it was wide." bugs the hell out of me, I will not lie. Actually, there's a couple of those in here. I won't harp on it too much- this is poetry, after all, and poetry's beauty is it's free form glory.
Overall, very well done. I will read more of your poetry in the future.
Keep writing!
Points: 194
Reviews: 35
Donate