Young Writers Society

Hello this is Foxmaster!!!
Whoa, so this was sad, but good! Anyway, let's get started...

A salty sea air filled the room, and in the distance, the sound of waves could be heard crashing against the shore. The old fisherman lay on his deathbed with his weathered hands folded on his chest. He had spent his whole life at sea, braving rough waters in search of the perfect catch. But now, as he approached the end of his life, he couldn't understand why it had all been so hard.

As he lay there, old memories flew through his mind. He thought of the first time he went to sea with his father and the feeling of pride and joy when he caught his first fish. His father had patted him on the back and said: 'Be proud of yourself Liam.' He was so happy that his father was pleased, because his father was hard to please. After that day, he had spent countless hours on the water, learning all about fishing and the sea. He had faced many challenges over the years, from heavy storms that threatened to sink his boat to long days at sea without any catch. But despite everything, he had persevered and was driven by his love for the sea.

As he looked back on his life, the fisherman could not help but wonder why it all had to be so miserable. He had worked hard, yet faced numerous difficulties. He looked at the sky and begged God for an explanation.

Suddenly, he felt a sense of peace wash over him. It was as if a burden had fallen off his shoulders. He realised that his struggle had made him the person he was today and that he had made a positive impact on those around him. He had provided for his family and contributed to the fishing industry, which was vital to the community as there was a scarcity of chicken and livestock.

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: This was such a short and simple tale but despite being this small, I think it manages to hit us with a really powerful plot and you actually have quite a few things to just reflect on and remember after reading.

Anyway let's get right to it,

A salty sea air filled the room, and in the distance, the sound of waves could be heard crashing against the shore. The old fisherman lay on his deathbed with his weathered hands folded on his chest. He had spent his whole life at sea, braving rough waters in search of the perfect catch. But now, as he approached the end of his life, he couldn't understand why it had all been so hard.

As he lay there, old memories flew through his mind. He thought of the first time he went to sea with his father and the feeling of pride and joy when he caught his first fish. His father had patted him on the back and said: 'Be proud of yourself Liam.' He was so happy that his father was pleased, because his father was hard to please. After that day, he had spent countless hours on the water, learning all about fishing and the sea. He had faced many challenges over the years, from heavy storms that threatened to sink his boat to long days at sea without any catch. But despite everything, he had persevered and was driven by his love for the sea.

As he looked back on his life, the fisherman could not help but wonder why it all had to be so miserable. He had worked hard, yet faced numerous difficulties. He looked at the sky and begged God for an explanation.

Suddenly, he felt a sense of peace wash over him. It was as if a burden had fallen off his shoulders. He realised that his struggle had made him the person he was today and that he had made a positive impact on those around him. He had provided for his family and contributed to the fishing industry, which was vital to the community as there was a scarcity of chicken and livestock.

With a smile on his face, the fisherman died peacefully. He knew his life's work had been meaningful and was content with the legacy he would leave behind.

His life had been meaningful.

Heyo!
I'm not sure how you keep coming out with new pieces of writing so fast. It's like you can sleep and write at the same time. (A talent I wish I had)

That aside, I'm here to give you a review. I love how short and simple this piece is, but what a big story it tells! How often people feel that their lives have been fruitless and meaningless! But, in reality, everyone has a part to play. The little things this fisherman did was what truly counted. He may have not been a man everyone heard of or knew, but he did his part, and at the end of his life, he is satisfied with that.

The lesson is so simple, and you convey it so nicely in this short piece. It's such a sweet reminder that you don't have to be famous or do big things to make a difference. Simply doing what you can is enough.

Overall, this is probably my favorite piece I have seen from you. You obviously put some thought into it.

I do want to say really quickly that you should probably add a comma between "yourself" and "Liam" in this sentence: 'Be proud of yourself Liam.'

Again, fabulous job.

Happy writing,
Kaia

Hi! Iris here to leave a quick review! <3
First off, this looks amazing! I can relate to it and it's nice to see what I feel in someone's writing. I love how it ends simply yet powerfully and it ends really sweetly. It's a part of dying that no one thinks of until it happens to them, and it's nice to see people writing about it <33 great work and keep on writing!