Hey, Wamdog321 happens to be my brother, so I found he wrote -something called 'life'. I have rewrote it in my perspective!
L- Laughs and Love the we share
I- Interests that we spend our life doing
F- Fun and Fantastic times there are
E- Empathy that we give the people we love.
Enjoy! :)
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Hi, there!
So here I am.
I noticed this already has a on of reviews on it, but I'm one review away from my third star (gasp) and this seemed interesting.
Ah, yes. These poems (I forgot what they're called). They're difficult, but simple at the same time. I'm going to take this line by line, then sum everything up.
Hmm, so, you could definitely be more specific. Who is this "we" you speak of? What emotions run through when you feel loved, when you laugh with whomever "we" is? Or you could mention the nice, cinnamon sweet smell at home, when you're sitting together in the living room, telling jokes. Or whatever you do. Details.
This one seems okay. But, it is a little broad and general, if you're more specific about interests, or something, that would brighten it up a bit. But this line seems pretty a-okay to me.
Again, details! Maybe you could mention one of these "Fun and Fantastic" times, like perhaps going to an amusement park, or going to the zoo, etc etc.
This line is very soft; it settles the whole poem very nicely, with a sweet, smooth touch. I love it. Just a small typo: "that we give to the people we love" - add "to"
Aaand, that's about it! It was short and sweet, and I love the happy-positive ness to it. Just try and add more imagery, emotion, and good heart to it(that is, if you're still willing to edit it).
Great job! Hope this helps, and thanks for posting this, so I'm able to earn my third star!
~ EternalRain
Thanks so much!
Hello CapitalMonday here for a review. I would like to begin that life can also have its ups in life (comparing to your brothers work). Life, in a sense, like a rollarcoaster with its up and downs and sometimes its own curves but unlike a rollarcoaster, some part in life people are on a highway straight to happyland since sometimes being happy is all you got to do.
Farewell,
CapitalMonday
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I really like this because it's short and sweet and it views life in a more optimistic way which was really refreshing. Life isn't easy but that doesn't mean it can't be good. You just have to hold on. Wonderful job!! X
Thanks so much!
It is sweet. Usually you hear poetry that condemns life to being a jerk, but you make it seem sweet and likeable. It was a cute poem, that I really enjoyed.
It was tiny and simplistic, and that's what life is right?
Maybe I'm reading into the lines too much.
that was really good. I liked it. Keep writing!
Thanks so much!
Hey! I thought you could use a review on this! I thought that it was adorable! It was so short and sweet, there was nothing negative about it! I agree that Life is made up of all of these things. Even if it is a hard time, it can still be fantastic! I think it might be fun if you just got rid of the little dashes so it looked more like this.
Laughs and love...
Interests that we...
Fun and Fantastic...
Empathy that we...
Then it would just be a little hidden message that those are the things that literally make up life. Good job! You're awesome!
Thanks so much!
Very pretty.
. I enjoyed it indeed. It may be short, but it has a beautiful meaning. Love and laughs we share. We do share beautiful moments together. I wish people could see it as wonderful as it is. People can be so blind about life. We have this life we are given and we didn't even deserve it. Life is so rare. I feel people don't see that. When abortion got started, over millions of babies got killed. Also people and babies die everyday, and you still have your life. That's a beautiful thing. Interests that we spend our life doing. It's like this website, we are doing our interest-writing. We love to do our interests. It makes our life enjoyable. 
.Fun times there are. We do go through quite a lot of bad times, but think about the fun everyone has in their life. Your childhood is a good place to start. All the trips to the park, the birthday parties, and using your crazy imagination was a blast. Empathy that we give the people we love. That indeed is true. Everybody needs someone in this life. Nobody is meant to be alone. I enjoyed this piece. Your brother did a good job and so did you. 
. Keep writing!
Thanks so much! That meant a lot to me! Thanks for taking the time to relate, and read!
I like it bc its postive and all but ill like to see the gud and bad n life bc there both .
Some like l-laughs and lust idk any negative l wods atm
I for irrelevant and interest
F -fun and the f***ed e-evil and the enjoyment idk something lik tat but lik I put on the other one I really like it yho tat my only comment
Kkeep writing ill b lookin forward to more of ur works
-oldsoulxoxo
Thanks!
bruh you copied me no fair don't be copying the things i write
I gave you credit, AND it was a POSITIVE look on life!
And please do not say 'bruh' on here- it is not exactly appropriate, and not needed! (Just a tip)
YOu aren't really allowed to copy things from people... and he can use bruh if wants too