Luscious Goldmine

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(NOTE--Truth or dare. It's evil.)
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A nose so golden
Crusty against my fingers
Only JabberHut's
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Lumi
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Lumi wrote a review · Mon Aug 06, 2012 1:35 am

Yo, Raz.

I think you have a promising start here, but you don't really delve into the golden, crusty meat of the imagery like I know you could. Now, I'm sure what you have here is enough: flattery, description, even a reference to a famous person! But I feel like there's something missing. I want to feel the gooey mucus. I want to feel the crust crumbling between my fingers.

As far as a haiku goes, I'll give this a B. And that does stand for booger.

-Lumesters

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Blues
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