The demon finds the violin at the back of the wardrobe, wrapped in a cardigan that smells of trapped dust. When he eases his fingers under the wood and catches his nails on the strings, he grins.
“A violinist?” he says aloud, and he can almost hear Sam prickling to attention at the back of his mind. “How’s your muscle memory?”
Put it back, Sam says.
Iza twangs a string. The sound is brittle and clipped. “You’ve not looked after the chap very well.”
I said put it back.
Iza swings the violin round and props it against his neck, though there’s no rest to soften the edge. The ghostly scent of polish drifts from the slippery wood, shaking the dust from a few of Sam’s memories, bringing them close enough to the surface that Iza can see them too. It’s small things, mostly. Grooves bitten into fingertips after a long day of practice. Sweeping sounds and bubbling happiness. The jagged screech of wrong notes, then rage frothing through his chest.
“You were talented at it, then?” Iza says, testing the weight of the bow.
No.
“Oh, come on. You won competitions. I saw that much.”
I was a kid. It’s easy to win stuff when you’re a kid.
Iza drags the bow across the strings, and the noise is knives on metal, glass on slate. He swings it back and forth like he’s sawing through a shank of meat, rearranging his fingers haphazardly, swaying in time with the bow.
Stop it! The neighbours will hear!
“Oh, are the walls that thin? I like an audience. I’ll sing as well, shall I?” Iza says.
Don’t you da-
Iza laughs, laughs in a way that Sam never has, and it clips his thoughts short. It’s strange to feel that kind of lightness in his chest, to hear his voice tumble and explode like that, strange in a way that seeing his arms and legs move against his will is not. He forces the thought away.
The demon puts the violin down. “Do I live up to the stereotype?”
Of what?
“Musical demons. The devil and his fiddle. That’s not a euphemism.”
I’ve dropped pans and made better music than that.
“Oh, you wound me! It’s not as though you’ve given me much to work with.”
Iza leans back on the bed, curling his fingers in the linen. Through the walls comes the buzz of slurred arguments, the clank of crockery, the creak of floorboards, which fogs the silence without filling it. A single pair of ears listens, but two souls feel the weight of it pressing down on them.
Fine. Whatever. Pick it up.
The surprise brightens Iza’s face, like light lancing through mist. As he moves to sit up, brushing the creases from his shirt and bringing the violin back against his neck, he feels the haze lifting from Sam’s memories. Strings of notes grow clearer, melodies bounce against the rafters of their mind, and Iza moves his hands and fingers to where Sam’s instinct places them.
Arm. Lift it up. It makes it easier.
Iza obeys as readily as if Sam were there to sculpt him into position. When he draws the bow across the strings, the sound is tight at the edges, but tuneful. Like a living thing after years of slumber, flexing the ache from its muscles. Iza’s heard the melody somewhere before, through another set of ears.
“And it’s called…?”
Waltz for One. It used to like it.
The notes waver and sing, sometimes coming unstuck where Iza hits a bump in Sam’s memory. It’s like climbing down a ladder in the dark, the demon thinks, and feeling the rungs beneath your feet. Occasionally missing one, but catching the next before you fall.
“Nice choice,” Iza says, hovering on the last note.
Sam says nothing, but Iza feels their thoughts brush together. He’s listening.
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Woah. The imagery in this is incredible. You blew me away. Since this is so short, I don't have a lot to say. I like the banter between Sam and Iza, you tell us a lot about them and their personalities through the dialogue.
One problem I found was how unconcerned Sam was that he was possessed by a demon. Has he been possessed for a long time and is used to it? At little background would help clarify this. Also, why is Sam so upset about the violin? Though I actually have no problem with you leaving this particular question unanswered. It adds a sense of mystery to the story and I really like that feeling.
I also like how you humanized Iza and didn't just make him some random, evil demon. He was a real character with feelings and opinions. I feel bad because I don't have much to critique you on but I had a hard time finding anything to say that wasn't praise. Awesome job!
Thank you! Yes, I can see Sam might seem oddly at ease, but you're right in assuming that he's been possessed for some time. There's a lot more to the back story of these two characters than is shown in this short story - I may write other stuff about it in future.
But thank you for the review, and for all of your praise!
Hello there,

This is amazing! Not even being hyperbolic—it's glorious.
I think I know why no one has reviewed it yet: it's honestly too good. So much of a review hinges on constructive criticism, and while some brave, brilliant reviewer out there may find something to criticize, I think most (myself included) will be stumped. I have no advice to give, no real criticism or even nitpicks to point out. That's how amazing this was. So let me just dive into some praise and comments and such.
Your writing is everything I look for. Each sentence fits together, creating seamless, breathtaking paragraphs. Your imagery—gorgeous. Your analogies—brilliant. There's a spark to this piece; it hums with life and reads like a full-fledged, perfectly-edited publishing work. Which brings us to your editing. I get the feeling you reread this several times, because I didn't catch any grammatical mistakes or pesky typos. It's so, so nice to read something that's been carefully edited. Obviously you know what you're doing, and I appreciate it.
The flow of the piece is on point and the conversation between these two characters—or one character divided in two?—is truly captivating and achingly well-written. I could use a million words to describe the writing of this piece (beautiful, striking, rich—to name a few), but I'll spare you. Point is, you're a great writer.
A voice is one of the hardest things for any writer to develop, and you already have one that's fully-formed and delightful. It's original, it's sophisticated, and it made this story crackle with life. That's quite a big deal, and you should be proud.
I really liked the story itself, as well. Short stories that focus on singular, simple concepts and moments and make them into big, amazing things are my very favorite to read. I like how the simplicity here hides a deeper meaning, and how so much of it is left vague or mysterious, so readers can fill in the blanks. You don't spoon-feed the reader; you don't spell everything out. You just show us a moment in time that's beautifully written, and leave the details a bit hazy. It's brilliant, really. Your style suits this story so well.
Anyway, I loved this. I'm sorry I can't be more constructive or helpful, but honestly there's not much more for me to say other than "well done."
My goodness, thank you! I'm glad that it wasn't too confusing to read, as it's only a snapshot of a whole back story I have for these characters. Thank you so much for the praise!