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I am not a jigsaw

by Panikos


At home, I have a husband.

Sometimes that’s all I think of him as. He’s nameless, faceless, no more than a rigid mannequin whose arms are loops for me to tangle mine around – handlebars to which I cling in order to anchor myself to the life I’m supposed to have. When I’m shivering in the early morning, hunched over the sink with droplets rolling down my face, I sometimes remove the golden collar from my finger and lift it to align with my gaze. It was supposed to be a portal. My wedding ring was supposed to be the doorway to a better, calmer life.

But it wasn’t.

My husband is a nice person. He is. I’m lucky to have him – that’s what I’ve worked out – because he is kind and considerate and gentle and has eyes that echo the colour of forget-me-nots and a wild, untameable thatch of dark hair that I’m supposed to be able to lose myself in. He’s meant to be my world, as beautiful as sunsets, tropical flowers and tides that tug away at sandy bays, and as exciting as new cultures, season finales and world exploration.

My other half.

If there’s anything I’ve gathered from life, it’s that human beings are generally thought of as two-piece jigsaws. We’re born as halves, and not truly completed until we find our other one, until our corners are neat and clipped and packed away into suburban lifestyles filled with mortgages and duos of children. And we’re supposed to like that.

My mother was always trying to complete my jigsaw. She never minded throughout my childhood, in which I spent my time creating adventures and worlds into which I invited anybody who I could persuade. It was when I grew older, and when all of my friends started dreaming about boys and girls and I started dreaming about travelling the world instead.

At first she was scared that I longed for the 'wrong' kind of half: one that was the same shape as me – a girl. But that wasn’t true. I didn’t want a girl, a boy, or anything in between.

I didn’t want anyone.

It wasn't something I understood it at the time, nor did anybody else. I just thought that I was wrong, that a fundamental part of me was backwards or deformed. All of my friends were attaching themselves to others and they did little but speak of how wonderful it was. Soul mates. Completion. Things that I did not want but was told I needed.

So I thought of them like injections. Much like pain, love wasn’t something I desired, but if I accepted it then it would do me good.

And here I am, a wife with a handpicked husband and a stomach that swells over my waistband, the weight carrying with it a feeling of imprisonment and dread. Looking in the mirror on those cold mornings is what exposes everything to me; the injections were poison, and I am bearing the scars.

It’s only now, far too late, that I realise that some halves don’t need to be neat and whole. Some of us are collages, not jigsaws, and instead we like to fill the spaces inside of us with scraps of experiences and activities outside of other people. Now my edges are pushed back and confined, held in place by a kindly man who I never wanted to intertwine with, and yet once upon a time all I wished for was to spill out into the world, to expand myself by way of mountain climbing, food tasting, friend-making and an infinity of other possibilities and hopes. I didn’t need a wedding ring. I didn’t need to pass on new versions of myself. I needed only to be as widespread and uneven as life itself.

Do not be afraid to have jagged edges. Do not be like me.

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Author's Note: This was supposed to be an important message about how difficult it can be to live in a world that thinks happiness relies on love, marriage and having a family when you personally don't want involvement in any of that. All reviews and critiques will be appreciated, because I'm not sure that this is as effective as I'd like it to be.

(By the way, this is not my own personal viewpoint. I'm merely trying to represent those who don't need love but are made to feel they are nothing without it).


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Hello, Subtle here for a review! I just ADORE this story, ok? I love it. I can't say how much I love it because I can't. Is realistic and beautiful and sends a really powerful message across to readers. Is well-written, the language is magnificent. And I will tell you how much I love it below. :D



I sometimes remove the golden collar from my finger and lift it to align with my gaze.
I love the use of golden collar, instead of ring. A collar is something that restricts and traps you. Just wonderful expression there.

has eyes that echo the colour of forget-me-nots
Comparing his eyes to flowers, only amplifies the beauty of his eyes and the gentleness of it. And all of this beauty is to be contrasted later, I love the irony in this story.

If there’s anything I’ve gathered from life, it’s that human beings are generally thought of as two-piece jigsaws. We’re born as halves, and not truly completed until we find our other one, until our corners are neat and clipped and packed away into suburban lifestyles filled with mortgages and duos of children. And we’re supposed to like that.


Bravo, bravo! Statement of the century and well-written too! How clever of you to describe how our lives are suppose to be like, yes. It does seem society have a set mind for us all to be white-picket fence parents with mortgages on our tail.

So I thought of them like injections. Much like pain, love wasn’t something I desired, but if I accepted it then it would do me good.


How I told you the you're a genius at metaphors and comparison for love? No, well you are.

Do not be afraid to have jagged edges. Do not be like me.


The ending packs a powerful punch to the readers, an ominous message but one that sums up the whole story effectively.

One word-amazing. I love this, this may be the only short story I've actually taken time to digest it all carefully. Wonderful writing, keep that up!

-S.s




Panikos says...


Thank you! Really, thank you! :D



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I really liked this, and I really enjoy that you've taken a point of view that a lot of stories don't. I reckon that it's pretty effective - there's the message, and it's easy for the reader to find, but you don't end up being preachy or forcing that opinion down anyone's throats. That can be a tricky balance, and I think you've gotten it just right.
I don't have anything to complain about, really, and I think that anything that needs to be pointed out has been.
The character, even though we don't know much about her, is likeable, which is a good thing. You didn't fall into the trap of making her judgemental of those who did want to fall in love, and that made this piece far more enjoyable to read, and less alienating if the reader didn't share her views that if you made her more adamant, I guess, in her views on love.
Don't question your ability to write an effective piece because this story showed a lot of talent, and was a really interesting and different read. Well done!




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Hi Dark! Rebel here to review. :)

I think you portrayed that marriage isn't for everyone just fine. I think that people who don't want to be married are sometimes regarded as strange by other people, and sometimes they feel like they have to get married, even if it doesn't make them happy.

The thing I enjoyed most about your short story was the description. You didn't go overboard with it, yet you didn't have too little-it was just right. :D My favorite metaphor was the ring being a golden collar; that gave me a vision of the ring constricting the woman. It made the ring seem unrelenting.

I also liked the ending sentence. It was short, sweet, and to the point. It wrapped up your story nicely.

There are two itty-bitty nitpicks that I have for you:

1) She never minded throughout my childhood, in which I spent my time creating adventures and worlds into which I invited anybody who I could persuade.
-The sentence just didn't sit write with me. I'd rewrite it like so: She never minded throughout my childhood; I spent my time creating adventures and worlds, inviting anybody that I could persuade to join me.
2) You had a slight spelling mistake on the sentence afterwards; "It when I was older..." should be "It was when I was older..."

Overall, you had a really nice short story. The flow was right, you had just enough description, and you effectively made your point.

Keep writing!




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Hi, Dark!

While I don't share the same position on the subject, I definitely think that there are people in the world who feel like this. You said you're not sure that this piece is effective, but I found it stunning. A hallmark of a good essay is to persuade the reader to see, if not adopt the argument you're making, and I definitely saw the point of view you were writing from here. You do a great job of weaving description throughout the piece, and if I've ever reviewed anything by you before, you know that description is one of the most important writing components to me. The narrator's voice comes through strong and clear. I love your metaphors and similes; you're not too purple-prosey but you still manage to convey the images you want to express. Presenting people as works of art, jigsaws and collages, is an excellent comparison.

As for the bad, there were a few sentences here and there that seemed a bit uncomfortable to me.

"He’s nameless, faceless, no more than a rigid mannequin whose arms are loops for me to tangle mine around – handlebars at which I cling to in order to anchor myself to the life I’m supposed to have." Something about this is weird and it doesn't flow like it should. Maybe if it were "handlebars to which I cling in order..." instead.

"It wasn't something I understood it at the time, and nor did anybody else." Drop the 'and'.

"Do not be afraid to have jagged ages." should 'ages' be edges?

Overall, an excellent piece. You have a wonderful writing voice and I hope to read more. :)




Panikos says...


Thanks! Two of those things you pointed out were probably products of absent-minded moments, so thanks for notifying me of them. I'm glad you thought it was effective. :)




The tools of conquest do not necessarily come with bombs and explosions and fallout. There are weapons that are simply thoughts, attitudes, prejudices; to be found only in the minds of men. For the record, prejudices can kill, and suspicions can destroy. A thoughtless, frightened search for a scapegoat has a fallout all of its own.
— Rod Serling, Twilight Zone