I like the poem "Falling Up".I think you did a good job but you could elaborate on them a little to include more imagery. Right now I think they seem a bit dull. You always have good lyrics and poetry overall. Have a great night Fiction.
don't know if these lyric poems relate to anybody. I found these in a notebook while I was cleaning under my bed, They relate to me in a way. Just wanted to know if there was anything to be reviewed, review/rate/critique? Your opinions matter a lot !! 
More to Our Story:
Caught in a world of trouble,
No use trying to change everybody while.
Storms find storm clouds over here,
I know where to go don't just stand there.
There's More to Our Story.
Falling Up:
Bought into the world it seems,
Paying it all just for the scene.
My life you keep chasing down,
Watch where you end at.
Eyes open me into your soul.
Break the glass,
Start Falling Up.
Best Summer Crush Ever:
We met young.
It wasn't really love,
but Summer Crush,
We never got enough.
Now we're older
Wish we were younger
I miss you when times can't be better
Should've known then, always and forever
Best Summer Crush Ever.
I like the poem "Falling Up".I think you did a good job but you could elaborate on them a little to include more imagery. Right now I think they seem a bit dull. You always have good lyrics and poetry overall. Have a great night Fiction.
Ok, thankyou! :]
It's about different people around me.
Not just one person. It's to reach out to anyone. 
Hi Pacific. Here's my opinion. It seems like each of your poems could be a tad bit longer. Extend the story. It'll be something beautiful. From my perspective, it seems like you're talking about one guy. So is it a collection to the big picture? Sorry if I sounded mean...
-Crescent
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