My name is Alice
I live in a palace.
I have no real friends.
My life is no end.
Ny name is Alice
I’m being proposed, but him-I can’t kiss.
So strange, I think I saw a rabbit on a due date.
Because hopping away, he’d cry, ‘I’m late!”
This world is too much, I know!
So, I followed it into a dark hole
Deep in the forest where I descend
As it seems to never end!
In a Wonderland,
I've become small like an ant.
I wonder who that is-
Why, it is that ticking rabbit!
In a Wonderland
I meet a Cheshire Cat.
Even a small man in a mad hat,
Who declares to be my friend.
"My name is Alice,"
I say trying to remember faces.
"You were here once before!"
They say pushing me into a door.
Alice in Wonderland
That is who I am.
"Welcome back! There is much to go over!"
The Mad Hatter says playing poker
Alice in Wonderland
"I must go back,"
"Must you know since you first left- there has sieged a war?"
Cheshire the Cat disappears and appears far.
“Alice in Wonderland
We’re so glad you're back!
But Jabberwock and the Red Queen's card men
Are in rule of the land!” Says the cat.
"Alice in Wonderland,
Our world is in great danger!"
Exclaims the bunny rabbit
"So must I stay and fight?" I ask. -"Tickety,Tock-Tick."
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The title immediately caught my eye. I can't wait for the new Tim Burton movie. I liked your poem but the rhyming was really off. I would go over that. I liked the image by the way. I'm looking for a mad hatter poster for my room. Anyway I see potential in this and if you need any help just pm me.
Matt
Wow, this was really cool. I love Alice in Wonderland so much, your poem of it is really good.
I think to improve you need to work on getting a rythm along with ryhme, because at some points I felt it and some points I didn't.
Overall I like the whole idea of it, keep writing, this was awesome!
~Tamara