:DGood Morning Sun

Hello! I though this was such a happy poem. For the record it may not have made me laugh out loud, but it did make me smile Not much to critique here, it was simple (by that I don't mean stupid, far from it)yet deep. Good Job!

This was really nice! However, it made me miss summer even more when I looked outside the window and there's two feet of snow! But that's good. I thought this little piece was filled with color and emotion in just a few lines, and crossed your message well. You like summer. I can't really find anything wrong with it except that the rhyming is just a tad bit forced. I really was caught on the title and think it fits perfectly.

The sunlight kisses my smile, Favorite line! #BF0000 ">A good start, just take out the comma I think it's unneeded
Leaves at night and misses the while #BF0000 ">A little confused with the 'misses the while' part
We come together and we play. #BF0000 ">I think you could take out the second we, it flows better
Children and families talk about their day
Under the stars where they count down,
Till the sun rises they dance around.
Thinking of Happiness and waiting for twelve midnight,
We'll parade and be ready to greet the sun so bright.

I felt like I needed to submit a funny piece...and I don't think it is really funny, Ha! I just looked outside and saw that ball of sunshine and said "What the hay? I'll write about the sun and how I'll miss it when it's gone. I kind of feel that way sometimes. Don't we all get goofy ideas by just looking at something you wouldn't usually write about?
Oh....right! Please critique this! I like other people's opinions. Especially on this one they're needed! ;D