Young Writers Society

Heya Noth,

Shady back with another review for you, as promised! I'm excited to see what comes of this spooky voice and what it means for Layla and Abaddon. Let's jump right on in...

"ỳ̨̺͚̐ͮ͂́ͩ͋ͣ͜o̴̸̤̦͚̐́͛ų̥̲͙̲͊͑ͣ́͛ ̴͍̦̟̬̥͔̳͊ͥ̿͆̍́w̸̷̙̪͖̪ͭ̉͗̅̌͢ͅá̵̶̡̩̫͈̼ͧ̋̿̔ͅn̺̻̳ͮͦ̍͘͠t͉̣̺ͪ̒̓̂̉͆͑ͭ ̫͍͖̰ͥͣ̾̓̿m̯̼̮̰ͧ͢ͅȩ̸͍ͭͬ̒͌̆ͫͯͨ͞ ̆̂ͨ̔͒͐̆ͪ̚҉̜͉ṯ͖̥̘͐ͯ͌̓̈́͟ö̵́̑͠͏̲̳͙͈ ̧̲͎ͣ̊̒ͦ̀s̴̴̛̗ͥͯ̚h̶̗͖ͨͦ̉̂̐̎ͤ̎ͪ̀ô͔̩̼̍w̆̂̑͏̨͚̠̗͎͙ ̰̖̤̻̬̿͗̈͒ͨ̿̌́͜m̙̭͕̖̲̠̭͎͖ͯͨ̃͆̇ͭ́́̚͘y̑ͩ͂͢͏̢̥͈̥̞͓̥̜̱̪s̸̡͍̘̮̳̯̩̔̋ͣ͒̅ͪ͑ͬe̙̺̙̜ͣl͚̤̖̠͒̂͑̿̓ͪ͗ͥf̶̠̩͇̩̲̟͍̦̜̽͗ͤ͗ ̈́͗̌͂̅͏̵͏̯̭̥į̣͖͍̱̼̳ͪ̒̓͐̅̎̐͢ ̛̰͍̝̝̖ͮ̊̈́̐͛͑ͪ̃͢p̵͕͓̜̳̗͚ͧͭͥṙ̵̤̤̳̙̫͕̲ͫ͆ͪ́ḛ̲͕̤̄̓̾ͭ͆ͬ͌̑s̟̭̗͙͎̪͌̽ͦ͗͂̔̕u̖̰͈̝̼͇̺̮͗m̙̥̹͈̤͎̋̅ͦ̐͞ȩ̷̡̦̜̞̝̜͕͉ͣ͋.͕͈̟̼̟̋̏̆͠.̛̮͕̳͔̩̗͆̔̇ͪ̑̆̐͞?̽̐̇͞҉̻̪̞͙̳̝̙͖ ͉̊í̉͑ͣ̅̄͊̚͏͎̜͕̤̜́f̴̝̻̞̾ͧ̅ͫͮ͆ ̵̗͕̰͈̪̯̔ͨ̄s̛̻͉̼̼̖͈͔̫̾͗ͨͅo͍̮̭̰̤͉̬̾ͦ.̶̜̜̫͍͆̏̓ͥ͆͡.̡͉͓̤̱̗̣̳̬̈́̄̀l̢͖̝͕͕̄͒̓̏̏ͤ̐͑e͓͓͇͔̩̭̎͒͛͒̽̀ͮ͢t̪͓̞͖͈̗͉͂̐̈́s͌ͧ͏̦̙̤̼̳̣ ̼͐̇̓ͯ̆ͧt̢͕̼̯̖͎̹͓͈̖ͮ̔̏̂̓͗ͪ̍̀a̛̲̹̱̹͚̙ͨ̾̋ͨ̽̎̕͟ͅk̛̏̇ͤͯ͋͢҉͙̦̳̥̰̜̟e̴̵͉̠͒͞ͅ ̨͕͇̽ͤͭ̊͌ͧ̍̂́͞t̰͉̝̗͛̏̌̓̆h̷̙̞̝̩͕̜̗̽ͣ̾̓ͨ͜͝ȋ̧̀͑ͬ̌͊̈́̚҉̟̗̺̫͉̬̟̞͉s͛̂̉̔̋̚͏͕̀ ̙̞̗̟̣͍̒ͬ̿̽͂́́s͔̠ͯ̍̆̇͐̔̀o̵̘̤̻͚̜̪̬͋ͫͨ͒͝m̍͗͒͐ͤ҉̱̠ͅę͇̮͙͙̮͈͙͈ͪ̋̂̚̕w̳̝͙̟̉ͧ̆ͧ̃͟ĥ̼̻ͣͥͥͬͪͦ͠e̷̶̷͎͖͗̉̋̀ͪr̬̥̩͓̣͔͙̜ͭ̿̉ͣ̓͆̕͝͠e̴̠̞ͣͭ̽͛̾ ͚̦͇͕̬̰͓̦͗͌̅ͥͯ̿̅͟e̅̿̉ͩ͏̭̱̣̦͈̕͟l͇͍̞̑͊͆̑ͨ̊͐s̷̨̞ͥͪ̿̽̑̌͟ͅe̟͖͖̤̲ͧ́ͩ̓ͧ́͠.̫̞̦̹̥͔ͫ͑͊ͧ̂̋ͅ.̵̵̷͍̦͓̫̘͗̏.̨̬͔̮̌ͨ̓̔͆̄s̨̰͔̞͎̝͇̖̓̂ͫͩ̍̄͜h̯̩̠͌ͩ͗͋͌͜͞ã̧̩̦͔͍̣̤͖͔̝̄̅̓͒͢l̵͉̘̘̳̭͓̲̼̎ͫͮ͒ͣ̐ͦl͙͖̱͔̠̺̙ͫ̾̌ ̛̞̠̬̹͓̙͐̊ͣ͊͌͊w̴̛̟̩̪͎̙͉͉͆̍̓ę͉͕̱̬͇̤̩̓̒͌̇ͪ̇͡.̸̰̅͋̀ͅ.̡̈ͬ̐͐ͫ̀̚҉̺͕̝̼?͕̲̥ͤ̎͒ͭͥ͋ͯͣ̉"

So Layla is an angel of death? How fitting. I think that this being might also be an angel of death, because the thing said that it was ”such a pity” that Abbadon, a demon, was defeated by it. Angels in this world might not be taken too seriously and this creature could have turned evil because of its mistreatment. Maybe it is a long lost family member of Layla..

I wish you an amazing day/night.

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: This is a lovely continuation from the conflict we had start on the last chapter and I am absolutely loving the reveal we had too. It looks like things are starting to come to a head now and I can't wait to see how it ends up being resolved.

Anyway let's get right to it,

before i knew it a knife appeared and stabbed through one of abbadons wings, he instantly let me go and was shot across the room.

"dͦ̒̉͏҉͚̦̜̱͙̝̜̦̣oͥ̽ͥͯ̿͟҉̼̜̤̖ņ̵͍̪̩̻̙̬̊ͥ̆͊̏'͇͚̲̲̿̏́̆̑̚t̶̨̜̖̫̗̦̯͒̽̿̍͊ͣ͠ ͕͔͇̒ͣ̓̀̕ć̍̎҉͓͈̠͠ö͂͞҉͚̬͔w̲̳͙͓̰̐͆̒̍ͬͩe̦̺̞̘͙͌ͫ̾͗͑͛̌͆͠͡r͚̰͇̄̽̓ͯ̈̇̽ ͖͇͉̝̼͓̯̩̘ͣͨ̀b̰̗̭̙̳͗͒̍̓͡e̴̷̥̣͐́ͨ̎̈́́h̶̳̹͚̓̌ͣ̓̌̆ḯ̴̖̤̱ṋ̛̭ͥ͋̋̅͘d̃͒͏̯̥͚̞̟̬̣͔̯ ̵̖̠̘̒ȁ̃͒ͮ́́͏̰̘̫̲̥̱̖͠ ̛ͦͮ̍̅̈́ͪ̏͛҉͈̞̣͇͔̰̦ḋ̳̪̭̩̦̦̯̃̇ͪ͟ȩ̳̮̖̭̘͚̞͑ͤ̃̑͢͞m̴̩̗̟̗̤͙̐͞o̺̪͆̓̎͘͞n̶̸͎̬͚̦̫͍̫͌ͮ̾̐ͨ͗ͧ̍̍"

abaddon struggled to get up but he then fell back down, i kept looking around in hopes to see this being but it was impossible...i can't do anything to help but i need to help him! "no..." i mumbled to where i was barely heard.

"ỳ̨̺͚̐ͮ͂́ͩ͋ͣ͜o̴̸̤̦͚̐́͛ų̥̲͙̲͊͑ͣ́͛ ̴͍̦̟̬̥͔̳͊ͥ̿͆̍́w̸̷̙̪͖̪ͭ̉͗̅̌͢ͅá̵̶̡̩̫͈̼ͧ̋̿̔ͅn̺̻̳ͮͦ̍͘͠t͉̣̺ͪ̒̓̂̉͆͑ͭ ̫͍͖̰ͥͣ̾̓̿m̯̼̮̰ͧ͢ͅȩ̸͍ͭͬ̒͌̆ͫͯͨ͞ ̆̂ͨ̔͒͐̆ͪ̚҉̜͉ṯ͖̥̘͐ͯ͌̓̈́͟ö̵́̑͠͏̲̳͙͈ ̧̲͎ͣ̊̒ͦ̀s̴̴̛̗ͥͯ̚h̶̗͖ͨͦ̉̂̐̎ͤ̎ͪ̀ô͔̩̼̍w̆̂̑͏̨͚̠̗͎͙ ̰̖̤̻̬̿͗̈͒ͨ̿̌́͜m̙̭͕̖̲̠̭͎͖ͯͨ̃͆̇ͭ́́̚͘y̑ͩ͂͢͏̢̥͈̥̞͓̥̜̱̪s̸̡͍̘̮̳̯̩̔̋ͣ͒̅ͪ͑ͬe̙̺̙̜ͣl͚̤̖̠͒̂͑̿̓ͪ͗ͥf̶̠̩͇̩̲̟͍̦̜̽͗ͤ͗ ̈́͗̌͂̅͏̵͏̯̭̥į̣͖͍̱̼̳ͪ̒̓͐̅̎̐͢ ̛̰͍̝̝̖ͮ̊̈́̐͛͑ͪ̃͢p̵͕͓̜̳̗͚ͧͭͥṙ̵̤̤̳̙̫͕̲ͫ͆ͪ́ḛ̲͕̤̄̓̾ͭ͆ͬ͌̑s̟̭̗͙͎̪͌̽ͦ͗͂̔̕u̖̰͈̝̼͇̺̮͗m̙̥̹͈̤͎̋̅ͦ̐͞ȩ̷̡̦̜̞̝̜͕͉ͣ͋.͕͈̟̼̟̋̏̆͠.̛̮͕̳͔̩̗͆̔̇ͪ̑̆̐͞?̽̐̇͞҉̻̪̞͙̳̝̙͖ ͉̊í̉͑ͣ̅̄͊̚͏͎̜͕̤̜́f̴̝̻̞̾ͧ̅ͫͮ͆ ̵̗͕̰͈̪̯̔ͨ̄s̛̻͉̼̼̖͈͔̫̾͗ͨͅo͍̮̭̰̤͉̬̾ͦ.̶̜̜̫͍͆̏̓ͥ͆͡.̡͉͓̤̱̗̣̳̬̈́̄̀l̢͖̝͕͕̄͒̓̏̏ͤ̐͑e͓͓͇͔̩̭̎͒͛͒̽̀ͮ͢t̪͓̞͖͈̗͉͂̐̈́s͌ͧ͏̦̙̤̼̳̣ ̼͐̇̓ͯ̆ͧt̢͕̼̯̖͎̹͓͈̖ͮ̔̏̂̓͗ͪ̍̀a̛̲̹̱̹͚̙ͨ̾̋ͨ̽̎̕͟ͅk̛̏̇ͤͯ͋͢҉͙̦̳̥̰̜̟e̴̵͉̠͒͞ͅ ̨͕͇̽ͤͭ̊͌ͧ̍̂́͞t̰͉̝̗͛̏̌̓̆h̷̙̞̝̩͕̜̗̽ͣ̾̓ͨ͜͝ȋ̧̀͑ͬ̌͊̈́̚҉̟̗̺̫͉̬̟̞͉s͛̂̉̔̋̚͏͕̀ ̙̞̗̟̣͍̒ͬ̿̽͂́́s͔̠ͯ̍̆̇͐̔̀o̵̘̤̻͚̜̪̬͋ͫͨ͒͝m̍͗͒͐ͤ҉̱̠ͅę͇̮͙͙̮͈͙͈ͪ̋̂̚̕w̳̝͙̟̉ͧ̆ͧ̃͟ĥ̼̻ͣͥͥͬͪͦ͠e̷̶̷͎͖͗̉̋̀ͪr̬̥̩͓̣͔͙̜ͭ̿̉ͣ̓͆̕͝͠e̴̠̞ͣͭ̽͛̾ ͚̦͇͕̬̰͓̦͗͌̅ͥͯ̿̅͟e̅̿̉ͩ͏̭̱̣̦͈̕͟l͇͍̞̑͊͆̑ͨ̊͐s̷̨̞ͥͪ̿̽̑̌͟ͅe̟͖͖̤̲ͧ́ͩ̓ͧ́͠.̫̞̦̹̥͔ͫ͑͊ͧ̂̋ͅ.̵̵̷͍̦͓̫̘͗̏.̨̬͔̮̌ͨ̓̔͆̄s̨̰͔̞͎̝͇̖̓̂ͫͩ̍̄͜h̯̩̠͌ͩ͗͋͌͜͞ã̧̩̦͔͍̣̤͖͔̝̄̅̓͒͢l̵͉̘̘̳̭͓̲̼̎ͫͮ͒ͣ̐ͦl͙͖̱͔̠̺̙ͫ̾̌ ̛̞̠̬̹͓̙͐̊ͣ͊͌͊w̴̛̟̩̪͎̙͉͉͆̍̓ę͉͕̱̬͇̤̩̓̒͌̇ͪ̇͡.̸̰̅͋̀ͅ.̡̈ͬ̐͐ͫ̀̚҉̺͕̝̼?͕̲̥ͤ̎͒ͭͥ͋ͯͣ̉"

we were now in a field but it was dark outside apart from the moon shining above the lands, i then looked in front of me and saw the being...but i was concentrated on abbadon who was behind me and now standing, one of his wings were folded on his back, the other dragging on the ground below him, i looked back at the being who was now visible and had an evil grin on his face looking at abbadon who was injured...

"sͣ͏̢̳̠̜̣̻̞͇͎u̳͚̙͓̥̙̅ͦ͐͊̓ͪ̇ͦ̕̕c͎̫̳̙̠ͦ̈̍̃̓̈́̊͊͜h̢͖͉̻͙̠̲ͫͩ͐ͪ̀̕ ̙͛ͤ̌͑͑ͥ͐ͮ͝a̻͔̦͙ͣ̍͡ ̷̡̗̦͎̹̤̮̓ͤ͒̐̌͌͂ͧ̅͝p̞͖̥͎̬̯ͮͪͨ͌͂͠i̺̮͐ͭͩ̈t̰̱̱͕͖̯͙̜̄̂̄̀̚y͚̞̘̮͙̎ͦ̽̆̆̀̔͟͠ ͍̠͉̯͐̏̓t̞͔̪̳͙̙̖̖̙͑͢͡o̘ͮ̋ ͚͙͕͛̓̐͒͛̾̕s̛̬͍̳̗̤̑̾ͭͤ̉́e̵̮̻̭͎͛͛ͯ͋e̢̞͇̞̫̪̽ͬ́͝ ̵̙̘̲̦̗͚͓ͣ̂̓ͪ͠a̵̺͉̠̻͉ͨ͒͆ͪ ̨̲͖͓̮͉̼ͭ̊d̸̶̙͚ͣͮ͋ͪͥ̅̔͐̓͟ę̨̪̦͔̬̼͕̓̊͐͟m̷͎͖͙̜̒͊̊ͧ͋ͭ̌ͥo̢͖͍ͦ̑ͮ͆ͦ̂̀͡ͅņ̨̳͇̥̻͈̇ͨ͑̋̈̆͒ ̛̛̰̤̣̤͓̻̠̊̿͡ͅb̲̟̹̿̉̓͘e̹̗̖̊͗̕͝ ̋ͫ̓ͭͨ̆҉̘̘̘̫͟t̷͔̝͉̪̠̺̅ąͩ͛ͅk͕̪ͭ̑̍̍e̢͍̰̘̅̾̔͠n͕̳̰̥̫̈ ̿̓̄̈́ͭͮ̐͢҉͔̲͓̤̜̭d̶̡̛̟͕̭̙̮̃̍͛ͥ̈̏͂o̧̬̻͈̦̤ͭ̄͋͑ͭͣ̋͜w͛ͯͮ̾̈̍͡҉̹͎͈̳͙n̆̾̈ͪͮ̚͏͍̜̱̳̤̱̠ ̳͖̙̻̳͕̦̒͆ͣ̃ͧ͑b̵͍̖͈̹͕̼͗ͮͩ̓̽̅̚̚y̡̙̔͋͐̓̆ͣ͘͠ ̸͔̗̹̖͈͓ͤ͆ͩ̿̑a̶ͥ̌͜҉̼̲̰ ̵̢͕̬̼͍̫̜̘̖̆̍̑ͧͤ̎m̠̻̖̻̲͙̊͞ȩ̠͓̩̗͋̾͐̎͛͊̉̈̔r̛͇̺̝̞̞̬̫̼̰̋̔̓̿͒͒͜ȩ̴̱̌̄̏͑͋̐̽ ̵̡͕͇̠̪͇̳̰̄ͯ͟e̷̮͔̗͚̘̪̼̟̿̑̇́̒̍͊̌͢n͛̓̔ͣ͊͒̂ͫ҉͉̤͉̬̥̘͖͠t͎̘̫̘̖̫̰̆͆ͦ̈́í̡̲͔͕͚͚̰̞͋̎̒̓ͭ̏ͥͅt̡͍̟̞̱͒̄̾ͧ̾͒̊́y̵̡̟̠͋̑͌̊͞.̯̦̒̾̀͘͢.̒ͪ͊̈́͑̚͏̩̣̝̠̠̬̤͈.͙̪͍̙ͦ͂̂͒̚͜"

the entity then appeared in front of abbadon and grabbed him by the throat, throwing him aside through a row of trees, my vision was then blurry and a blue light appeared around me...

that hurt...but i was able to get up and run back to the area where layla and the entity were, but i never expected to see her with such power, her eyes were purely white, her hands seemed to transform into weapons and a trail of blue light appeared behind her like a waterfall, it seemed there was more eyes behind her, it was as beautiful as a peacocks feathers, yet, it was terrifyingly beautiful...what power does she with hold inside her for so much pressure to be felt in the air...? her left eye looked like there were branches spreading out but it was blue...

"Angel of deaths dark beauty..." was all i could say at that point...