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*Please note that this is NOT my actual suicide note, this is based off of the various notes I have written in my previous attempts, but I'm trying really hard to get better*
Thank you
I love you
Don't cry
My dear sister,
I'm sorry
I wasn't a better older sibling
You deserve more
Mom
I love you
I never hated you
I hated myself
Daddy
I know I yelled at you
I know I hit you
I'm sorry
My Love
You're the one person who understood me
Who cared about me
Don't try again
Please
I love you more than anyone else
That ever came into my life
You are an amazing person
And I love you
I love you so much
You were my first love
My first girlfriend
The first person that has made me truly smile
In years
You might be wondering why
Well I would have assumed it was obvious
You chose to ignore the signs
The scars
The fresh cuts
The blood on my sheets
I stopped taking those damn pills
You noticed
But you didn't do anything
I don't blame you
I'm insignificant
It's just a phase with my friends
Daddy, you don't support me
Mom, you don't trust me
Sister, you ignore me
but then again I've ignored you as well
Mom, Daddy, don't argue anymore
Not in front of her
She doesn't deserve that
I did
But she never does
Don't cry
I love you
Thank you
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BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL🥹 IM IN LOVE WITH IT! I WOULD MARRY IT! It's so amazingly written and spoken in my head! It gives so much emotion and realness feeling to it and is just wonderful! I can't help but to repeatedly read it over and over again I'M IN A PARADOX- Its so heavy feeling and describes many scenarios, but one specific heart wrenching one will always stand out! Anyways truly beautiful! Hope you get better and continue pushing on I believe in you! Sorry for saying beautiful like 500 gabillion times its just so OMG WOW!
aww thank you
okay! This is very beautiful and let me tell you why! (Also I hope you continue to keep pushing out of this hard phase of your life and I hope you know all of us in the YWS are cheering you on)
Anyways, one part I really loved was right here:
I love this part of the poem because it really summarizes all of the hurt you may have felt from your entire family in a beautiful and symbolic way. It sums up everything and leaves the reader with an understanding and open heart toward your past situation.
I also love this part as it is quite relateable toward the readers. Everyone can feel insignificant sometimes and these lines perfectly lay that out. Having blame cast only at yourself is a difficulty no one deserves, yet a beautifully real concept. I wish you'd expanded on this idea of insignificance more if you're serious about perfecting this poem. I feel like there's so much more to discuss in this section of the poem so these beautiful words don't get mushed in with the rest. If you focus on each individual part, they won't get blended together into one poem, but rather different emotions coming together to make up one person.
I hope this review was helpful and that you are recovering.
Best regards!
-Jane Amelia
:3 ty