Many Things Have Changed - Chapter 1

by NotReallyHuman

Published June 28, 2026

12+ Mature Content

In Poetry

I woke up to darkness. The cold damp of the stone floor seeped through my thin shirt, sending shivers through my body. The acrid smell of old iron clung to the air, mixing with the faintest trace of decay. As my eyes adjusted to the gloom, I made out the jagged outline of high windows, their panes thick with grime. The room was empty save for a single wooden chair positioned in the center, its surface marked with deep grooves that could only be claw or knife marks.

A single candle flickered weakly in a sconce on the far wall, casting monstrous shadows that danced across the walls. My head throbbed in time with my racing heart. My fingers brushed against something smooth and cool on the floor beside me. A shard of glass. Instinctively, I closed my hand around it, the sharp edges pressing into my palm as I pushed myself up to a sitting position. Every muscle in my body screamed in protest, the joints stiff and aching as if I'd been frozen in place for days. The taste of blood filled my mouth—whether from injury or dehydration, I couldn't tell.

The chair's shadow stretched long across the floor, grotesquely elongated by the candlelight. As I looked at it, I noticed fresh bloodstains on the stone beneath it, dark crimson against the gray. They weren't dry yet. A door creaked open somewhere in the darkness beyond the candlelight. Footsteps echoed, heavy and deliberate, approaching the cell. My grip tightened around the glass shard as the sound drew closer, the cold metal cutting deeper into my palm. The pain was almost welcome—the sharpness of it kept me alert, focused.

A figure appeared in the doorway, silhouetted against the dim light behind him. He was tall, his shoulders broad beneath a dark coat. The silhouette shifted, and I glimpsed something metallic glinting at his belt—keys, perhaps, or a weapon. His voice, when he spoke, was cold and measured, like someone reading from a script. "Stand up, Ajax. The others are waiting." My muscles protested as I stood, the glass shard still hidden in my clenched fist. The man didn't seem to notice, his attention fixed on some point beyond my shoulder. He wore a laboratory coat stained with what looked like surgical fluid, and his hands were rough and scarred from countless procedures. The iron smell was strongest near him—metal and disinfectant mingling with something more organic, more threatening.

"The others," he repeated, his tone flat and clinical. "We've prepared a test. You'll join them shortly." He turned toward the door, expecting me to follow. His back was exposed, his movements casual, as if he assumed I was too weak or too compliant to pose a threat. The cold metal of the glass shard felt reassuring in my palm as I followed him down a narrow corridor lined with more cells. Each one held a figure hunched in the shadows—my fellow subjects. Their eyes tracked me as I passed, some with desperate hope, others with resigned despair. The man led me to a circular chamber where the others were already gathered, standing in a loose semicircle around a raised platform.

"They're not as cooperative as you," the man said, gesturing to the others. "We've had to... persuade them." He produced a small remote from his pocket, pressing a button. The platform began rotating, revealing a series of mechanical devices embedded in its surface. Restraint mechanisms gleamed under the harsh lights, their metal arms poised and ready. "Today's test is simple," he continued, his voice echoing off the stone walls. "You'll step onto the platform and submit to the procedure. The others have already experienced the benefits of cooperation."

One of the other subjects, a girl with matted brown hair, turned toward me with pleading eyes. "Don't trust him," she whispered, her voice hoarse and strained. "Whatever he tells you, it's a lie." 

The man's expression darkened at her words. He pressed another button on the remote, and a mechanical arm snapped forward, its grip locking around the girl's throat. She gasped, her hands clawing at the metal as it squeezed, cutting off her air supply. The other subjects watched in horror, some stepping backward, others frozen in place. "Silence," the man said, his tone never rising above a conversational level. "We don't tolerate interference here." The mechanical arm released its grip, and the girl collapsed to her knees, coughing and wheezing.

The man turned back to me, his face impassive. "As I was saying, the platform awaits. The procedure will take approximately thirty minutes." The man's hand moved toward a panel on the wall, his fingers hovering over a series of switches and controls. Around the room, the other subjects shifted nervously, their eyes darting between the mechanical restraints and the man in the lab coat. A thin girl with pale blonde hair stood near the platform's edge, her shoulders hunched as if preparing to run. The youngest among them, a boy with matted brown hair, kept glancing toward the door, his small hands clenched into fists. The air felt charged with tension, the harsh fluorescent lights casting everything in sharp, unnatural clarity.

"Time is limited," the man said, his voice echoing off the sterile walls. "The others have been waiting for you."

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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Jun 30

Heya~

I like how you start with setting the scene! I feel like you rely too much on adjectives/adverbs but otherwise, great start!

What others do you mean here? “where the others were already gathered” because you described the others being in their cells in the corridor but now we are in the circular chamber and… who is in there? Not the others from the corridor, that’s for sure o_o

I think this is an effective start of the story.
The only thing I’m missing is …more from Ajax. More of his thoughts as he does this. Why is he following this person? Did he know him from before? Why did he immediately think he needed to arm himself? Just… more inner thoughts.

Also why was there even glass lying around in Ajax’ room? That seems to be quite the oversight XD

You might want to think about a more engaging summary 😊 Since the story follows Ajax, it’s a bit redundant to mention that he’s the MC. Maybe you could think abt what thing we are Ajax following for and put that in the summary?

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WAAAH I DO NEED TO WORK ON IT SORRY THANK YOU I suck at summaries even that took me like 13 minutes ToT

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Jun 29

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the macabre S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Ajax is trapped in a facility where he and others are used for experiments. He doesn’t know how he got there and why he’s there, but he’s there and there’s no escape…or maybe there is…

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, you may.

Chocolate Bar - I like the way you describe the room, it sounds very creepy. Only the candle to light and show the glass and the blood really feels like Ajax is all alone. I also like the way you described the man’s voice, he doesn’t seem like someone who cares for the patients. I absolutely love the atmosphere!

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, it was a fun first chapter of the story! I’ll be certain to read more chapters so that I can learn about Ajax and the others. I’ve enjoyed reading this and…

I wish you a glorious day/night! ^v^



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— Larry McMurtry, Comanche Moon