The following poem like all my other poems are part of my daily challenge (routine). Where in I: make a poem everyday, make sure poem x 's last word is the same with poem b 's first word;so on. Starting with my June 8th post, the second phrase's algorithm will start.
Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
Both are colors of my love for you,
Red seen as bold and velvety,
Bold for I am,
Velvety like my feelings,
Also thought as seduction, yet I prefer strong love,
The color's symbolism is as red as it can be,
Blue as the waves, for they express freedom,
So with the breeze, relentless and unnerving,
Such it is sadness, yet the opposite I deem,
Because my purpose is true,
Hey, can I call you boo?
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Hello. It's just Ink here with a review.
As a last word, have fun with your poem routine 
So your poem routine sounds interesting--to start a new poem with a different poem's last word. Good luck with this routine! Anyway. On with the review. While the "roses are red" poem is so common it's kinda cliche, I really liked the way you expanded it to show some color symbolism: red for "strong love", blue for freedom.
The biggest issue I have with this is the flow. When I was reading it, I found myself tripping up over the phrases and lines of the poem. Whether this is your style or not, I want to point this out. I enjoy your word choice here, but I wish the structure of the phrases would flow better. For example, assuming that you mean "For I am bold" for "Bold for I am" , I'd like to ask: which sounds smoother on the tongue? The 1st or the 2nd? To me, the second sounds smoother (though I don't know if that's a great choice :p). I believe that tweaking some sentence structure, reading poem aloud and sensing the rhythm, and also examining how the lines flow into each other can help you with this!
The last line was startling--and to me...well, I'm having a difficult time digesting that. I was sailing across this poem(I love the word choice, I repeat) and then--bang!--the colloquial line popped up. It jarred me in a not-so-good way and it wasn't, at least in my opinion, a great way to end this kind of poem. Though perhaps it was included for a surprise! factor or something like that, it didn't exactly work. I'd suggest 1) cutting it, or 2) including some of the silliness in the previous lines and removing some of the seriousness so that it won't be too surprising.
So overall, I'd say I like the word choice and the symbolism but I feel as if the flow needs some work. Hope this review helped, and don't be afraid to ask me questions--I'm happy to try to answer any you have!
Thanks, especially for reviewing again. I've explained most of my habits in the other comment. I was somewhat confused since I read that one first, anyway yea, I ran out of ideas for the last part and thought that the question was good enough, like I've said just an explanation xD
God Bless.
I cannot tell you how much I enjoy roses are red poems. Not gonna lie, yours was a little more romantic than the ones I usually come across/come up with, but I enjoyed it anyway.
Alright for a short little review here.
1) "Red seen as bold and velvety,"
I think you should add an "is" before "seen". It would make it read easier.
2) "Hey, can I call you boo?"
I really liked that ending.
Alright. Short work, short review. That's just how it goes.
Keep up the poetry! I look forward to seeing more of your work in the Green Room!
Cheers,
Jimmy
Thanks bruh! I appreciate the review.