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Thanks, Pyxis. I'll keep that in mind. The names i'm using right now probably are not going to be the ones i'm going to end up using, but i'll keep a few of them. Thanks for the advice. I'll definatly keep posting my work!
I really liked this-
the plot seems promising
My only problem is the name Deski-it just doesn't seem like it would fit into the time frame.
There are some minor problems, but if you read through you should find them.
Keep writing this. It's great!