Lucy in the Sky with Maturity the Mystery Cat

Beautiful and true. Loved it!!!

Hello!

Maddie here to Review your poem.

First off, I gotta say that the dynamic of rich vocabulary and so much amazing imagery I must say I'm very impressed. You gave the reader a lot to imagine in just four stanzas, and that can sometimes be very hard to do, so kudos for that.

Of course, I did look into your two references. As you mentioned, you did take from both, and that somewhat makes it hard for me to really dig into your poem, mainly because you are recycling poetry. Because of this, it requires me to look at the original work and try and understand those two before I can really analyze yours to see what you meant by using said lines. That, and they aren't your original ideas. All the rich imagery and vocabulary isn't based on your own imagination, so it loses its vibrance to an extent. It causes the reader to question what your true ability is, and of course, the poem itself.

If I can offer any kind of advice, I'd say reword the parts of the poem you took directly from the references. That way it doesn't come off as copying and rehashing, but instead, it's a reference as intended.

Thanks,
Maddie

There were some good lyrical points in this poem, and I loved reading it and I really enjoyed the rhymes.
Now to nitpick.
You use a lot of comas, but you also miss a couple of places where comas are needed. For example, after "the flying heart's despair" you write "because," which needs a coma before it. I also read a pause there, which a coma would indicate.
The details are on point, though the poem does wander off topic a little at the end of the first stanza.
I liked it.