This is absolutely gorgeous! I'm not a poet so I don't know how accurate I can be, but I can try. The only thing I was wondering is if you could do more with punctuation. I felt like the lines started to run together a little bit as I read. I would recommend playing with punctuation and capitalization to guide flow! That may have been on purpose, though. Either way, I have no other critiques! Your wording is absolutely gorgeous. The repetition read really nicely, and the wording of your lines carries such beautiful emotion and imagery. Awesome work! Keep writing!
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