When you look at me
don’t look at me.
For I am only a mirror
and all the beauty
you claim to see
it’s just the reflection
of you in me.
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Hi this is demoncat revewing.
This is really cute. It makes me all kinds of happy. Like I just wanna hug my reflection right now. Would it be weird to hug the mirror? Or is this poem perhaps not about mirrors? But about conforming to society? And how everyone try to be the same? Or is there an even deeper meaning? Like not standing out? Or something like that? But like you can tell this poem is good because I just keep rambling on about it. I can't stop imagining a cut little chibi mirror person. Like could you imagine your reflection giving u a little heart shaped box of chocolates? Or like sending you a meme of a cat saying your beautiful. Or hang in there. Or I hate Mondays? That's what I'ma imagining rn. OMG so cute I wanna draw this poem. Like a cut yandere reflection omg! I love it! Eek! So cute!
Hi @Leviari, I love this poem! It's short, but the message is extremely powerful. I could definitely feel your emotion as I read it. The first two lines are simple, and you still don't know where it is going, but as you get to the second stanza, you feel how significant they are to the meaning. Your description of the mirror and reflection creates imagery, which shows me that you put a lot of thought into your word choice when you made it. I think your decision to use rhyme in the second stanza was very smart because it contributes to the themes of the poem and how it is read. I really like this, keep writing!
Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on your work, on this lovely day.
Okay let's start.
So I did see something that can be fixed, but it was really small.
Okay so the word in bold is what I would like to talk about. So to me this sounds like the end of the sentence, so there should be a full stop after the me, before moving onto the next line. It will flow better that way.
Well that was all I could see. Other than that small thing, this was a really well written poem, and I really loved reading it. It had a pit of emotion in it, so it made it quit sad an heart warming. And we could feel what you were feeling when you wrote the poem. So amazing job.
I really like the name you have picked to, it also hold quit a bit of emotion in it, and that is why I am here reading and reviewing your work.
Well that's it from me for now. I really liked reading and reviewing your work, and I hope I will get to do it again when ever you post more work on YWS. So never stop writing and have a great day or night.
Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.
Thank you for your review, I corrected my punctuation. Your feedback is always very precious! <3
Aww thank you so much! <3 I'm glad I could help you out, and if you ever want me to review a work just let me know.
Hi @Leviari I am here to do a quick review on your poem here,
The poem
I really like this hole poem. Every line is spun tack you lear. You really have got some strong lines here, I think that the riming in this poem was grate to, your description was out standing here for the poem. So all in all I think you have Done a grate and fun tab you lis job here.
So that is all that i can say, So keep up the grate poem writing, I look forward to hearing another.
@EagleFly Out To Seek And Kill
Thank you so much!
Your welcome.
This is a really sweet poem. It seems like a classic in a way and it is really memorable! The choice or words is perfect and it could defenetely be a love-letter between some couple in a shakespare story. That might be weird thing to write but I love when things you read gives you associations. The only thing I think you change is to put a full stop at the first sentence. Otherwise it's good!
Keep on writing!
I love the idea of the shakesparean couple! Thank you for your feedback and you're right, I'm totally adding the full stop.