Hey Laelle!
This piece of writing contains devotional and a sort of spiritual subject (related to each other). Nevertheless, I see the significance of the title, as it is subjective to the supreme lord.
Content wise, it's clear how you express the lord's shrine located up in the heavens, to us known as the skies. This is a simple yet clear subject of discussion. You have captured the interests of not only the religious, but also the others who seek interest in learning about the love of the lord.
Grammar and Spelling, is in good shape. I spotted how you've added emphasis on "His" to dignify the lord. This adds on to the topic of significance of content. This is a wonderful start.
Structure wise, it's recommended that you organize the content into stanzas. That way you don't intimidate your readers into finding something huge. Each stanza could discuss a different aspect of the lord, for example. Otherwise, no serious issues.
Content is very coherent, as you are simply describing the lord's glory and his shrine in the skies. If it were sort of like a narrative, attention had to be given to writing consistency too.
Literary devices are widely used here. I am able to find metaphors, adjectives, and personification.
My personal rating for this work is 4.1/5
I shall add a "like" since your work gets 80%+ from me
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