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You Make Me Cry

by Lael


The hardest part of school
Is having to face you.
You haunt me in the halls,
Every page in my binder
Always reminds me of you.
Every molecule in the air
Knows who you are
Yet it seems I watch from afar.

Often I wish we were friends,
That I understood your ways.
No matter how I look at you,
You are so amazing and fun.
Your reactions speak many volumes.
Yet my performance is often poor
When it comes to you.
I want to hide when you come by.

You make my mind go crazy.
I am so confused because of you.
I can’t breathe when I think of you.
I am tested again and again,
And I am always so afraid
That I will once again fail
To find the true solution,
To finally get it right.

Then for once I got a perfect score
And I believed that things
Would be easy from now on.
But now as I study you again,
I am back to square one,
Even though I love you,
Because now you’ve gone back
To being an unsolvable equation.

Perhaps my newfound confidence
Precipitated a worsened situation.
But why you are so cruel to me
When you took part in making me
Who I am today?
Oh, Chemistry, you make me cry.
I guess you are not my density.
Ah, excuse me. I meant ‘destiny.’


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AriannaC wrote a review...



You just made me smile, silly goose. I like when poetry isn't always so serious and has some humor in it. This, my friend, is one of those poems. This has also become my favorite poem. Overall, I think you are very talented and funny.......This is kind of short but I am in a hurry right now, so yeah. Jesus loves you!

Until The End
-Ari




Lael says...


Wow, thanks! That means a lot. <3



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soundofmind says...



This was really clever haha! I like it! :)




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Tue Mar 14, 2017 4:52 pm
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Hello, this is Ace101 here to step in and do a hopefully helpful review!
So Lael, I think you did really good with this poem, I could understand everything and it was all really good!
it was really funny and made me smile ;)
btw, extra great job because I have never seen anyone do the hummer in a / censer sort of poem so amazing job their!
I really had no comments in the bad category so great work and I would love to read more of your work!



Ace101 out!




Lael says...


Thanks!



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shore!



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Mon Mar 13, 2017 1:29 am
AlyTheBookworm says...



That twist!! xD
I was expecting another tragic romance poem until I read those last few lines and burst out laughing. Though I don't have time at the moment for a good long review (not good at reviewing poems anyways), this is awesome and that plot twist at the end was simply hilarious. :)




Lael says...


Thank you! That's what I aimed for. :)




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