Hey there!.
I just happen to come across it and you have elaborated a idea into a great structure. Conversely, I might add that in a lyrical rhythm has to be added as in use of same tone after every next sentence or use of same sounding words in consecutive sentences.
You seem to have made every statement An assertive by using I at the beginning. It would have been a lot better if the statements were ended in rhythm
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