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OK, so, couple nitpicks:
"soft like" in line six. I think some punctuation would clear it up because I don't know if you mean "soft-like" or "soft, like..."
And in the last stanza you use "we" but switch to "you" in the last line.
Otherwise, lovely poem. The subject is great, the analogies better, and the nostalgic tone very nice.