Hi there! Thought I would stop by for a quick review. I really hope this helps
Overall the poem is very well done and I was immediately drawn in by the title. Vertigo is such a relatable concept and I think you have illustrated it perfectly in the first stanza. Through expressive phrases like "blinding pace" you have painted such a clear image of this strange and often wordless feeling.
However the rest of the stanzas seem to lack such language and are in some places repetitive, like the use of the word 'turn' multiple times.
Be sure to carry the same energy from start to finish.
In all I really enjoyed your poem
You have an excellently creative mind, keep up the good work!
Points: 178
Reviews: 7
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