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Seventh Crown XIII

by Elijah, AutoPilot


Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for mature content.

Do not read if you had not read the previous parts.

Seventh Crown XIII

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It did not look like he minded her doing it for him.

As soon as his upper clothes were taken off, she couldn't help but stare at his chest. Licking her lips shyly, she kept on staring at the dips of his well defined abs. And when he reached for the zipper of her dress, she couldn't help but get excited.

It was risky and who knows when someone could come and catch them doing something like that. Even if he was only half naked, it was enough for her. The sound of the zipper was making her impatient. She knew he was doing it slowly on purpose, just to tease her even more. "So unfair.." She whispered and looked away, having redish hint over her cheeks.

Even if he wanted to do it slowly, he could not bear the pace. While they thought everything is going on smoothly, the zipper got stuck and did not move anymore. "Perfect," he sighed and looked down at her, smiling,"now if you'll excuse me, I need to do this." She had no idea what he was talking about. Before she could even say something, he ripped off the part where the stucked zipper was, making it fall down on the floor together with piece of her royalty clothing.

That made her shiver and look at him with these drowning eyes he could not help but drown into. "Why are you looking at me like that? You know what they make me do!" He bit his lower lip and the second later, capturing her lips withhis. The moment in which she could take her breath and a small break from the deep kiss, she smiled and replied to him. "Oh, really? The same goes for you, Mr.Deep eyes." she teased him and kissed him softly before he start deepening the soft kiss of hers. She was between Cage and the cold wall against her back but she did not feel nothing else but the warmth of his hand over her back while they were in the small living room of the house.

The moment in which her dress was lifted up and her opened her widely opened, one of the guards came and decided to not comment. Cage sighed and pushed himself away. "What is wrong? You are kind of fast, don't you think?" He was as cold as always towards the others, looking at the guard, Cody. Cody had no idea what to say even if it was obvious what was going on. If he could turn back the time and come minutes later, he would do it. He did not say about the view he had seen and the blushing royalty against the wall. Cage was already taking his clothes back on when Rebecca finally came back to her sense. "Ah, what?" She said, without knowing to say to be able to explain everything right.

"It is okay," Cody said, knowing it is not his business who the Queen is with, even if it was one of her beloved guards, Cage. "this is not something I am connected with. I am here to talk about what Sam and I found out about this city."

The Queen was embarrassed but she put herself together and covered herself up before she felt even worse than that. Her dress was ripped and she needed to hold it so nothing shows off. She sat down and closed her legs tight so the dress does not open.

Cage was giving her gazes but she did not reach back to them. She wanted to calm down first. "Come on, tell us about it. Also, where is Sam? I thought I sent you both together."

"They started asking many questions and in the end we needed to run away. Maybe we looked suspicious because we asked too many questions and they started to ask us back. Well, I think it did not turn out well." Cody was sweating down to his neck. It looked like he had been running a lot. "You need to rest. We will talk about it later. So, Sam is captured there because they think he may be someone dangerous?"Cage asked while helping Sam to go lay down on a blanket they had prepared for him.

Cody have been sleeping for more than four hours and while he was sleeping no one else came back. No one from their guards. The situation they were in was not the best because of what had happened hours ago between Cage and Rebecca. The redish cheeks of hers did not come back to their normal state as Cage was still giving her these gazes that was making her shiver.

-to be continued-


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Sun Jun 26, 2016 7:11 pm
Hannah wrote a review...



Back again!

Well, I was surprised that there was a zipper involved. Maybe I'm not quite clear on the time line of the story, but it seemed like "old" times, where people needed guards and rode horses, and long before zippers were invented. I bet that if you researched historical clothing a little bit, you'd find that the ties used to close dresses could be frustrating the same way.

Next, I do want to talk a bit about how they interact with one another during the act. You wrote about how Rebecca "knew" he was taking his time with the zipper just to tease her. That felt to me like someone who had been in this intimate relationship with someone before would know. And maybe their childhood relationship had been similarly teasing, but is that the same emotion they are in tonight? After not even being able to talk to one another, focusing on getting to a war zone, and needing to deal with a monster? Even if they are happy to connect with one another, would they default to such carefree teasing? It felt strange to me. I assumed they would need time to get to know one another in such an intimate way again. Whenever two people meet for the first time in such a situation, there's a little insecurity -- they're not quite sure of how to work with the other person in this way.

Also, I really love the drama you've planned by having the villagers react poorly to Cage's plan of questioning. That's his choice, and his responsibility, and it's gone wrong. He'll have to deal with it. But I wonder why the villagers wouldn't come and find the rest of the travelling party here. I figure they'd want to deal with the whole group, not just whoever came to question.

Anyway, we'll see what happens as we move along.

As always, if you have questions or comments on this review, please reply here or send a message.

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Hannah




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Mon May 02, 2016 12:40 pm
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Heyaaa!

I am speechless. How should I review this?!
You did not rush down. It was all written nicely. I liked this chapter also. The words you used to deescribe the scene, were very beautiful. You have described everything very nicely. I never thought that the story would take such a twisted turn. It was all unexpected. I am amazed. It was superb. It is a very deep love. The story is flowing very well.


Keep writing!
Continue, continue.
I like your narrating skill. I am not left with any more words now. I stretched my comment somehow to make it a review.
:D




Elijah says...


I hope you liked it. I am writing the 14th.



Eros says...


Wow! Thats great!



Elijah says...


Ah, well, I try my best. This part is written by me without the editors.



Eros says...


You are yourself a good editor as well! xD



Elijah says...


XD Well, thanks.



Eros says...


WelC!



Elijah says...


Hey, come to the chat. I am not able to talk with you through pm!



Eros says...


Yaay!!




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