This was meant to be a string of haikus, but formatting refused to let me put spaces between them.
No matter how bruised
And battered I may be, just
Know that I'll be there.
No matter how much
Anger and pain you cause, please
Know that I'll be there.
No matter how screwed
Up your life gets, you need to
Know that I'll be there.
No matter how much
Time we spend apart, please just
Know that I'll be there.
What I'm trying to
Say is that I love you, and
I'll be there for you.
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Flame here, as promised!
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I am awed. This is sends a powerful message, with the repetition of "Know that I'll be there." It's hard not to repeat what the reviewer below me wrote, as it was short and sweet, and I had to admire your fluency and rhythm. I just want to gush about it
However, there's one small mistake. Second stanza: "No matter how much anger and pain you cause, please..." Cause who? This is a little confusing, since you just transitioned from "I" to "you." Just fiddle with that a bit, and your piece will be sparkling!
Can't wait to hear (or read, I guess?) more from you!
~Flame
Thanks! I was also questioning that same stanza myself, but I just hadn't gotten around to fixing it.
No problem!
This is just amazing! Hats off!
<3
You wrote it very well. I loved the rhythm and the lines are so mesmerizing.
I love the words you used too.
Even though it's just 15 lines i love it!
It means a lot its small sweet and realistic!
Keep writing and inspiring!
Thank you so much for commenting.
I really appreciate it.
Wow, loved it! I suck at writing haikus, so I can really appreciate what you're doing here. If you want to separate stanzas, shift + enter, or just use hyphens or periods.
Sorry for writing so little; I'm in a half-dazed state right now and really need sleep. I'll try to get back to you!
Thanks for commenting.
I tried to do the shift enter, but it still refused to work. 
Oh, that's fine. When I separate stanzas myself, I don't bother with the Shift Enter thing; I just use dashes or periods or stars, so that the site acknowledges that there's text there and that a line should be skipped!