Greetings Poet
Beyond my beloved horizon, I'm setting sail into uncharted pages with an itch for adventure. Through binoculars, I spy with my little eye an appealing poem titled “dear twelve i love you-sixteen” that deserves a good review. Therefore without further ado, let’s begin.
I. It all Begins at the Beginning
I've stumbled upon another intriguing poem of yours, a poem which tells another intriguing story. Well, perhaps I should define it as a melancholy intriguing poem.
You begin the poem with telling a tale about a young girl, who is twelve years old and colourblind. And you use imagery and descriptive words to paint a clear picture of the world that the young girl is living in.
The poem leans on terms such as "illusive colours", "stained grey" and "sickly green glow", these terms create a heart-wrenching and moving atmosphere.
II. That Part
In every stanza you tell another part of the tale, the first where she is twelve, the second where she's thirteen, the third where she's fourteen and so on until the last, where she is sixteen.
In the last stanza, the young girl became a young lady, she reflects on her younger years, became "familiar with the pain" that she felt every time and she remembers "twelve", the girl she was, and she is "sixteen", the young lady she is now. "Sixteen" looks back and realises, that all she has now is everything she could have asked for when she was "twelve".
That part, the last stanza, that part about "sixteen", is the part that really touched me. The emotional depth in your poem is way bigger than I thought, it went deeper than even "twelve" would have thought.
III. When All Is Said And Done
Everything in all and all in everything, you have written a rather beautiful poem with a meaning so deep and yet so touching. Perhaps you could try to make it rhyme, it will definitely add to the emotional depth of your poem.
That's it, that's all
Hoping the review has been of value to you
With writer's love,
Rose
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