Gamora
You know I love you Perter Quills
You found me when I was lost
But I've never felt so alone, dying without you.
I don't know if you can hear me in this dark place
But I know our love reaches to the ends of the galaxy
So I just want to say goodbye
Thanos can rewrite the Stars
Though you have been my life
Thanos can decide you and I
Though you have always been my destiny
Thanos can take you away from me
Though you are my heart.
Thanos can say who we are
And he has taken our love tonight
Peter Quills (To Gamora)
You think it's easy saying goodbye
You think Thanos can separate us by a mountain of death
But I refuse to let you go
Thanos may have killed you and destroyed my heart
But I swear it, he will pay, and I will make you see hope
You are my light, and you always will be
No one can say who we are
No one can rewrite the stars
No one can take away our love
Because you know what?
Thanos will never erase you from my heart
Together
All I want is to dance with you
All I need is you're love
Gamora: But that can never happen.
Peter Quills: Yes it can.
Gamora: That is impossible!
Peter Quills
I will never believe that we are impossible!
As long our love is there
We will always be together.
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I don't know too much about Marvel, but this was a really sweet piece. I love angst and love stories, and this tied into both of those categories. Having to say goodbye to a loved one is hard, and it definitely adds to the drama of your work.
I must say this was a little hard to follow. I was a bit confused by the sudden shift to dialogue--I was under the impression that this was a poem. I would suggest removing that snippet at the end, as it threw me off and didn't really help your work.
I wanted to talk about a few technical issues that I noticed throughout this piece.
This is sweet in conception, but it wasn't executed in its best form. I'd suggest a few minor changes.
For one, maybe consider using "but" instead of "though". It would work better in terms of what you seem to be wanting to convey.
The poetry of this overall is gorgeous, but it's a bit redundant, and for that reason, I can't critique/comment much further
Thanks for sharing (and keep writing!)
Clairia
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Thanks for the review <3
Thanks for the review <3
Is this poetry or a medicine for my heart?? Amazing, I must say. Keep the good work going. I love your style of writing. You inspire me,Gamora whisperer.
Thanks <3
Hello Queen of the World!
It's you monarchy friend Lady Mysterio here.
Goodness I almost started crying.
It makes me want to write one about Hawkeye and Black Widow, not to this song though. Contrary to popular opinion they are not in love and shouldn't be shipped, just friends who have been through a lot together. (hawkeye has a wife and kids for goodness sake!)
Back to your song, it definitely reads to the tune of rewriting the stars better than when i last read it.
Thank you Lady Of Mystery <3
Between you and me I actually hate the pairing of Hawkeye and Black Widow. *sighs. People will take the best friendships between a man and a woman and then call it a romance. I HATE it.Anyway, that's a sign if worked-if you almost started crying, <33
YES THANK YOU I AM NOT THE ONLY ONE!( first comment)
LOL(second comment)
That's how a judge the quality of a written work-by how hard it hits the reader.
YOUR WELCOME! (;I really like this. Amazing poetry and I nearly started singing to it. I can really feel both their pain. I really loved Gamora's POV. She's hard to read, yet you made her so vulnerable. Very relatable. Great job and never stop writing!
What can I say? I'm a Gamora whisperer.
And of course, thank you <33
Hee hee. U sure are a Gamora whisperer