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Like the others, and relate this poem to be nice and accountable for as In the form It is written and that lyrical pattern isn't contradictory but rather is compelling. Little is to be given as a review to your work, but I think it doesn't really matter because as long as you have a friend who's the restless, yourself would have no peace and so the peace of one's friend is as well your peace.
Most of the times, we seem to go through a lot that can deny us of so many things and sometimes, it creates a deep cut that can easily not be mended as many wounds takes time to heal.
I seem to like your element and language of repitition as it added to the structure of the poem and in this, the poems diction is simple and easy to gulp.
Even the language is low and thats kinda cool. I wish NAPO would have poems like this.
Thanks anyways, hope to review more of your poems.

Hi, BrokenHeartsAri here for a short review!


This was a relatable poem on my behalf.


I Really love each line, and how the repetition you used really brought it all together.


My favorite Lines are:

"who sometimes feels defeat

who sometimes compiles

her feelings in her chest"



I really enjoyed reading this



My only critique is the last line.

Other than that this was an awesome poem!



Keep up the great work!

This is the first thing I've read on here, and I could NOT have picked something better. This is phenomenal and I love the wording and how it's written and the emotion behind it! I think this is so special to me because I too, unfortunately, have a friend

Good work!

Hey there! MapleWay here dropping by with a quick review!

This was a very nice and relatable poem. I really liked the repetition you used as well. My favorite two lines were, "so I try to be a good friend to make her feel better." I can feel how much you care for this person and how much you want them to feel better and be ok. The only part I would change in the poem was in these two lines. "I don't know what to say to make her feel better." I would change the two lines to one line looking like this. "I don't know what to say." I think the, "to make her feel better is unnecessary and is just dead wait. But feel completely free to ignore this!

Anyways great poem! Tag me if you do another!

- MapleWay

Hi there, mordax here! I love your poem and the concept it touches on.

Let's get to it...

I have a friend

who is always cheerful

who is sweet

who always smiles

I have a friend

who sometimes is tearful

who sometimes feels defeat

who sometimes compiles

her feelings in her chest

I have a friend

who I try to help

but I always stutter

I don't know what to say

to make her feel better.

I have a friend

who is judgmental about herself

so she hurts her health

Her cuts are deeper than her body can bear

her muscle tissue is worn and torn.

I have a friend

who sometimes needs help

so I try to talk and laugh with her

so I try to be a good friend

to make her feel better