Young Writers Society

Hello!
I really like how matter of fact this poem is; I always think that such coolness of description gives an interesting spin to concepts like this that usually require such passion and heat.
If you're going to use the cool cite/citation word play, which I definitely think you should keep because I love it a lot and it's really witty and brings a lot of humor while somehow maintaining the seriousness of the topic, I'd get rid of "citation" from the title, which makes it feel overdone.
Hope this helped! : )

So this kind of cracked me up. I love satire so much *coughcough A Modest Proposal coughcough* but not enough people write it, so thank you for creating this. Can I just say that I hate creating citations? I never realized how muchh trouble I could actually get myself into until my English class this year, when I had to write three essays alongside full MLA citations. That was fun.

Bravo on forming a nice, flowing poem; two line increments was perfect for this. I never would have thought of combining a couple and citations, but you did it really well. I know that this is satire and all that, but if you ever edit this, then I'd say to take away "the" in "by the destiny" because that was too wordy, and that the lines beginning with "pissed and frustrated" would sound a lot less weird as "The secretary was possed and frustrated when he heard..." Same as with "heartbroken and betrayed they were," as passive voice makes this sound kind of awkward.

I don't really have any advice for you, as this was just to poke fun, but good job nonetheless. You got me to laugh some, which I always enjoy, so thanks again.

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

I will be totally honest... I have no idea what this was about. I've never even been to a wedding, let alone understand how they work, but still. As a poet, it's kind of your duty to make the topic of your poem more clear. Now, leaving some mystery for the reader to interpret is a given. However, there should always be some part of the poem with facts given to the reader, or they won't be able to understand the myteries of it.

However, I enjoyed this poem nontheless. Looking past the parts my lack of knowledge didn't let me understand, it was a deep poem. You have a knack for making the reader feel emotion, which is especially impressive when the reader doesn't know what's going on. So, congrats on that!

My other suggestion is to switch the perspective. You have it told from a third person narrator, which is fine, but if you want people to feel even more emotion when reading, having it told from one member of the couple's perspective would go a long way towards that.

Overall, this was a great poem. I hope I didn't sound to harsh at the begininng, cause I really did like it a lot. Keep up the awesome work, and I look forward to seeing more from you!